Stress

Hello, EmPanda15!


First and foremost, I want to thank you for uploading such a relatable topic; I came here because of the name alone. I want to tell you to KEEP THIS GOING! I feel as if you were putting your emotions on display, which is how every poem should be, in my opinion. I think that the way that you described it was an excellent way to describe it.

I want to tell you that I am here; what I mean is, I am here for you to talk to. I don't know many people on here, but I am willing to make friends, so in case you didn't know....

When you said:

"Stress.

Crushing you

Draining you

Drowning you in an abyss of darkness."

...I couldn't help but think of the abyss being of limbo and vertigo. I see stress the same as I see confusion and agitation. It's like being wet with clothing. I like your example because although it's a similar feeling, there can still be a difference.

You also said:

"Nothing can save you

You are both the doctor and the patient."

...I felt chills when I read this part. I think that for ME, I feel stress is an invisible virus. It bites at you and your infection eats at others too. It's a weird analogy, but I think it's clear. I don't have anything else to say other than, keep it up! I really do like your poem, and would love to read more. Anywho, I am going to go now. I just finished another chapter in my story. Toodles~

Hi there!

The title 'Stress' brought me here and I thought I could write a quick review.

I don't know why, but I was feeling so nervous while reading your poem and every line brought me anxiety, because you have really achieved to put in words what it really feels to be stressed. And reading your poem I was like, I certainly do not wanna get stressed now. Among all feelings (if we can call stress and actual feeling), stress is the most negative one, influencing our physical and mental health in a very negative and even harmful way. Really, you got it there.

As a teenager I must admit I've felt stressed sometimes (not much because I'm not the kind of person to get easily stressed by stuff) and I totally understand that feeling of being crushed down into something which you can't reach. Not being able to concentrate. Etc.
It's really effective the way you have repeated the word "drown", because it is as though it is emphasising to the reader one of the main feelings associated with stress.

The ending was simply awesome.
"You can never escape the stress,
But you can always fight". This is a lesson people should have in mind. That life in itself is many times stressing but it depends on us, not to be consumed by that stress and fight it.

Another verse in which you succeeded in creating an image, is when you talk of how you feel both the 'patient and the doctor'. The way I understand that is how by being the doctor you wanna do your best to fight this "stress" but as a patient it is difficult to cope with it sometimes. And in my opinion this links directly to the last lines and to the overall message of the poem.

Another thing is, well done on your use of adjectives to describe 'stress'. It really made me poem very attractive and interesting to read.

Overall, the poem was brilliant! Keep up the good work!

Rosalia

This is Nikayla here dropping in for a review!

I understand that this is a poem about stress! A subject matter that's commonly touched upon in poetry and even in writing. With that being said, I didn't find the ideas to be fresh or have a new spin to them to feel new and the execution of this poem isn't strong enough to drive the fact that this seems to have been done before. If I have to put a way that this poem ended up being overall in a single word, I'd have to say recycled. With this poem we aren't given anything new to digest because these words have been used before, these verbs have been used before in a similar context and there's nothing to leave an emotional impact.

Don't just give the readers these strong verbs without making a noun actually do something. I don't see the point on focusing this all on stress. I also have to say that I'm not a fan of lines that consist of one word because of how lazy they feel when looking at a poem in grand scope. I'm not saying that this poem doesn't have potential either--this holds potential to be a stronger poem, that part just isn't unlocked yet. Unfortunately for the present, the potential is wasted and ends up going down the drain.

The speaker addressing 'you' can be turned into a lot more than just talking about stress. Show the audience what stress is. Make them feel that emotion. At the end this shows to be a bit of a sub-genre of these types of poems where '[insert negative feeling or emotion] never wins' telling the reader that there's absolutely no escape from stress in the end, though there's the possibility of keeping stress at bay. That's the problem.

This poem is so literal about stress and avoids going into any sort of figurative language or metaphors or similes to compare what stress feels like. Don't just assume that the reader knows this emotion--teach them this emotion. To some it might feel like a bowling ball on their chest and to others it feels like they're constantly worrying. Describe how the emotion of stress feels from personal experience and maybe even research in this poem. Go more in-depth and work from there because this holds potential, you just need the right key to unlock it.

If you have any questions, don't be afraid to ask! I hope I helped and have a great day.

Hi! Thought I'd drop in for a quick review.

This poem of yours is so, so honest and true. I loved it!

The words were well-written and punctuation marks were used wherever required. Using lines with one or two words increased the power of the poem. I did not notice spelling mistakes and stuff. I would recommend removing "the" in the twenty-sixth line (second from bottom). Not dividing up the poem into stanzas made it more impactful and nice to read because it portrayed the frustrated condition of the stressed person which made him speak very little and that too in a hurry.

Now coming to the actual contents of the poem. As soon as I saw the title "Stress", I was like "I HAVE TO read this poem." You see, stress is a very relevant topic in today's age and you wrote about such a sensitive topic in a nice, sensible manner without blaming anyone for it or arousing confusion in the mind of the reader. Emotions and feelings were expressed well, and I think that's the most important quality of a good poet. Honesty shone in every line. This work was almost perfect! I loved it!! The last two lines ended the already beautiful poem on a beautiful and poetic note (if you know what I mean). They were my favorite lines in the whole poem. Overall, it was an amazing piece which portrayed stress and anxiety in black and white from the victim's point of view. Keep up the amazing work!