Portal to another world
Which can be entered but never fouled
For while this gateway exists
Someone on at least one side always persists
That you do not break it…
A testament to its role
It protects those from elements they cannot control
Whether in London, Toronto, New York or Beijing
The window transcends location as the monarchy a king
Often overlooked and taken for granted
In stormy weather it is never dented
Reliable as any soldier can be
The window serves both for you and for me
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Although i didn't quite grasped the concept of this poem, it has a nice tone and I love how the words are placed whithin this poem. What I like to find out of poems is the flow of the major concept that you had written this poem about. I'm sure that you are a great poem writer, and will continue as one, and for the record I had enjoyed reading this poem. :3
I liked this, even though I didn't full grasp the point. It was simple and sweet, which I liked. I like your word flow, keep writing! I would like to read more of your works (and maybe more about the window
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Hi!
I'm going to be honest, I read your poem 3 times and still didn't quite grasp it. BUT don't worry, poetry has never been my strong point! (So it's not you, it's me. BTW, isn't this a common break up line?)
Well, I think that this poem does brush on a topic about connections. You make it international by listing countries, a good idea, because sometimes it can add a bit of reality to a very idealistic poem.
Also, I think you were trying to establish a connection between the author and the reader, that's always a good skill~
Now, this isn't really a review only because I can't really understand the piece. I, do, however wish to tell you that this piece did make me think for a while, exactly what such a window would like, and whether the appearance of the window even matters...
And what the other world was? Maybe for writers, imagination? But then again, imagination is needed everywhere, and for every career. So then I started thinking about what the other world was until I hit an epiphany. That maybe this was the purpose of the poem, and that's why you made it so vague on purpose. Sorry if I bulldozed through a very deep meaning, but I just wanted to say that this piece really made me think. Thanks!
the end was better than the first part but I still enjoyed it it was short and sweet and i really liked this bit
"A testament to its role
It protects those from elements they cannot control
Whether in London, Toronto, New York or Beijing
The window transcends location as the monarchy a king"