Another poem for my chapters. This one was typed on my Blackberry on a 8 hour ride
back from Ohio haha. Considering, I like it. How it rhymes and flows together so nicely is why.
I didn't know what to name it so it'll be nameless for now.
Three of a kind
Two of a pair
One stands alone
No one else is there
A friend you may see
Somewhere in your dreams
But when they approach
An enemy they may be
And if you must choose
The decision you make
May effect them all
In every way.
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Well, when I wrote it the beginning was very easy to write.
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I got to end and it got complicated. I had actually written it without
"single" there before. I switched it up a bunch of times before It came
to what it is lol. I do agree though.
Thank you
This is a very interesting poem with a lot of meaning to it. However, for flow, I think a few words could be edited. Perhaps you could separate the lines into stanzas?
Perhaps this line could do without the "an." I think it flows better, but that's just me.
I feel as though the word "single" could be omitted from the last line. The meter throughout the whole poem is relatively slow and meditative, but then, at the end, you have to read it quickly: in ev'rysingle way. Perhaps the "single" could be taken out, and the pace, or, if you will, tempo, will be consistent throughout the poem.
Please remember that you reserve the right to completely disregard my advice!