Great job on your poem, I liked it a lot. You had a great use of periods and commas, and I loved the beginning.
It was interesting how your poem slowly got darker from.
Sinking like a storm,
Rising like the tide,
Enough to drown.
Enough to swallow.
Gently suffocating,
Roughly cherishing.
That was my favorite part.
I also really enjoyed the part about how far a breath can stretch.
How far can a breath stretch?
Bend, break or mould?
Can it fill a broken heart?
Will you let it?
It flows perfectly to the next part like your asking if you will let love in. Overall I really enjoyed it. Nice job, keep on writing!
- LUNARGIRL
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