This is a nice poem with an amazing message. I like the rhymes and the flow of the piece. I love the whole poem. I have just a one suggestion:
3rd stanza: "but they tell her to sit down," maybe the "but" should be changed to "and"? Because I would think that her being a child, people would think she needs to sit down. The "but" makes it seem like telling her to sit down is unusual of her being a child.
Love the rest of it!
Points: 107
Reviews: 12
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