Name: Eryka Presley
Age: 14
Gender: Female
Nationatily: African-American
Hair color: Brown
Skin color: Brown
Eye color: Brown
Wears Glasses?: Yes
Personalities: Goofy, Kind, Shy-when she is around random strangers-and brave(sometimes...-_-)
Body build: pretty thick…
Sibling(s): Eryelle Logan(4 years apart)
Father: She doesn’t like to say his name
Mother: Eurrika Presley
Friend(s): Natehan Terry, Gerige Desia, Red, Snake, Scott, Russ, Pewdie, Ken, Mazia, Minx, and Krism
Enemies: Sorry, I could found any enemies yet…my brain hurts...:(
Loves: Listening to music-Dubstep, Rap, R&B, and Pop, playing games, and joking around.
Occupation: Student
Born: July 5, 2000
Birth Place: Memphis, Tennessee
Living: St. Petersburg, Flordia
Weapons: Red Soul Dagger
Relationships: Jodan Lesoye(Ex) and Ryan Terry(Dating)
History: Eryka was born in Memphis, Tennessee on July 5, 2000. She was the youngest of two children-she has an oldest sister named Eryelle Logan. She was raised by her single mother named Eurrika who was overprotected of her children(aka her cubs as she would say) from the cruel world. She attended Whitehaven High School after her sister graduted from there on 2014-Eryka graduted from Havenview Middle School at the same year.
Others: 1. Eryka has a born mark on her back that was a symbol of warrior.
2. She knew Ryan on the YouTube. His name is Cryaotic who she always watched and loved…and trolled her on the Gmail. She also knew the others on YouTube and mostly on Cry aka Ryan’s livestream.
3. She has anestors that are warriors on her father’s side.
4. She has three different personalities: Mad! Eryka(Maddie), Virus!Eryka(Vicki), and AntiVirus!Eryka(Annie). The two of her personalities-Maddie and Vicki- were the ones who are evil-Annie; however, was the good girl who was trying to protect Eryka from her oldest sister, Vicki. Maddie only comes out when Eryka was mad and stabbed the person that made Eryka pissed off with her sharp knife-sometimes, she killed when she was bored; Vicki could do everything she wanted on Eryka’s laptop-making her game that she was playing crush, making her laptop have full with virus, and bring someone inside her ‘world’. Also, she could easily kill someone who pissed her off like Maddie-however, she doesn’t kill her.
5. Eryka and her family moved to St. Petersburg because she was chased and punched on the stomach hard by the members of Guda.
6. She was bullied by other kids sometimes because she wasn’t beautiful and ugly at Whitehaven. At Lakewood High School in St. Petersburg, she was also bullied by white girls-sometimes black girls- because she was black and fat. And the fangirls of Cryaotic-and the Last Night Crew- theatened her because she has a close connection with Ryan(Well, the fangirls knew his name like her) and his friends.
7. She and Ryan have a very close relationship that her mother and his family thought they are lovers. Actually, her mother doesn’t accepted it.
8. She stayed mute and pay attetion to work when she was in school.
9. She sometimes said the n-word, nigga.
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When I posted this character bio, it always like that. I didn't get to tell you that since I have to go.
Hey! Happy Review Day To You Because I Have One For You! I'm RainbowPowerPonies and I am a bit of a fangirl myself.
ancestors vs. anestors...... hm..... thats okay I make that mistake ALL THE TIME! Also Nationatily vs. Nationality. Just move the 'l' over. attention 
Simple.
You have potential, unleash it and let it run free or keep it a caged secret. But whatever you do continue to write.
Okay let's start spelling mistakes.
Then, 'her mother doesn't ACCEPT it' not accepted. Wrong tense also payed not pay wrong tense again.
Also you say 'the Gmail' which should in my opinion be simply 'on Gmail' the extra the is overkill and an honest mistake. Other than these simple and honest mistakes there is no problem with this and I love it the character is creative and amazing. One of my favorite things that really intrigued me was, she doesn't like to say her dad's name or talk about him. This was VERY interesting! Now I wanna read this when it's published so please tell me when it is.
I love that it takes place in THIS year! That's great! I can't wait to read it!!!! So um.... I mean please tell me when you write it cause I wanna read it if thats okay.... Also is 'The Murder' The fanfic that gos with this or something else? Why did she curse THAT word at 9 there are a lot of questions to be asked about this character like what was with her father. I'm sure they get some explanation later which gives a hook to anyone who reads this character profile. may i suggest something? Formatting. It's not essential but would make this easier to read.
In conclusion, I would LOVE to read this and it would make me very happy if you told me when you publish it. And to finish off as I always say keep writing keep writing and enjoy literature for its one of the many blessings of the world.
~RainbowPowerPonies
Hello, Cryaotic! Raven here for a review! Happy Review Day! Also, HAPPY BELATED WELCOME TO THE SITE! Now that, that's out of the way... onto the review!
One of the first things that I see is that this is one huge paragraph. Which is a bit confusing to read. I read some of these things being a bit confused, then I realized that they should be on a different line. Perhaps go through and put each thing about Eryka on a separate line. Although, this could be the result of copy and paste gone wrong, so I won't dwell on that long.
Hm... Interesting. So something must have happened between her and her father. Bad past, perhaps. I am now interested in that!
It seems like Eryka and her mother's name are the same. Both different spellings of the name Erica— at least, it looks like that to me. I like the spelling of the names, though! Very unique. (The similarity between Eurrika and Eryka make me think that the main character is named after her mother.)
It seems like this dabs a bit into the Youtube community. With the mention of "Pewdie." I might be wrong, though. Just a wild guess! If this is about Youtube (and reading on it appears so) and she doesn't have any enemies... (forgive me if this offends you) but Sam Pepper could be one. There's a huge list of people frowned on by that section of the internet that could be enemies! Also, the trolls in the comment section could be taken into account.
EDIT: Sorry, I couldn't find any enemies yet; my brain hurts. Or, a simple "None yet" could have worked!
Ooh, so this is set in 2014!
EDIT: and trolled her on Gmail.
FIX: ancestors
Oh, different personalities might be hard to write! However, I bet you can pull it off!
FIX: accepted, attention.
This seems like quite a story! I can't wait for more to be posted!
~Rae,
Ok, so, um, character sheets usually go inside blogs. Welcome to YWS!
African American isn't really a nationality, it's more of a race.
Instead of one big paragraph, you can make it into a list like
It's spelled nationality
It's ancestors
Eryka Presley sounds like Elvis Presley. I wonder what the fan fiction is. This chapter is interesting, but I wouldn't say unique. The most unique post about her is her split personalities. How is she not in jail if she murders people for fun? That's my main question.
Well, happy review day!
~Lost
Actually, it always like that when I posted it.
Hey there! So I'm a big fan of storybooking and I love character profiles! Whenever I'm working on a novel, one of the first things I like to build is a document with details on all the main players in the book. So let's see what you've got here.
First, you need to make this more readable. Every new detail should be on a new line - age, nationality, siblings. How you find anything at a quick glance I have no idea!
2. I'm not sure 'pretty thick' is a very descriptive body build. It may be more helpful to decide if she's athletic or overweight, tall or short, spindly or filled out. There are a lot of ways to describe someone's body and I can honestly say I've not heard someone refer to it as 'thick' before.
3. Is the sister 4 years younger or 4 years older? Stating her age would be more useful than saying how many years apart they are.
4. In regard to the father, these are facts so I think you should still list his name. You can say she doesn't like to tell people about him as well, but this shouldn't be written by her. It's your notes on your character and a reference for later.
5. In the Others section, I think you mean a birthmark, not a born mark.
Overall, you've got some good detail going on and it looks like a great start. Over time you may want to add more details about her appearance so you don't get confused later - it helps to know how tall characters are and any extra bits you decide on like habits they have. For example, one of my characters tucks her hair behind her ears whenever she's nervous while for another I've listed words he frequently uses in dialogue because he has a very set way of speaking.
It's always fun to see other people's character sheets - thanks for sharing!
Heather xx