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What To Write, What To Write

by ChocolateLlama


          Hmm, I haven’t written in a while. Writer’s block I guess. I just can’t think of anything. Oh sure, there’s controversial topics to write about, but what’s the fun in that? As if they haven’t been written about a thousand times over. I’d like to write my own story, but I can NOT picture myself doing that with the, uh, “experience’” that I have. I guess I could write about myself. Yeah, that seems like a good idea.

          Okay, my name’s Kade. I’m fourteen, and live in North Carolina. But I’m about as far from redneck as it gets. I prefer PS3 football to playing it, but watching it is a damn good time-waster. I live in my own mind, know about the real world but I’m more than reluctant to actually live in it. A few adults have told me that I’m a hell of a lot more mature than some people their age, which I guess is as much of a bad quality as it is a good one (Oh, and if you’re wondering why I’m cussing here and there, it’s because that’s how I talk. That precaution at the beginning was there for a reason, jackass). Like I said, I’m way too mature sometimes. I could go on about it but we’d be here for days, so I’ll spare you the time. I’ve also been told that I’m pretty intelligent, which doesn’t pair too well with my severe laziness (Yes, I consider laziness a sickness, a disorder at least). I’m honest, almost to the point of brutality. You ask me a question and you can be damn sure I’m gonna give my honest answer and opinion. Oh, and I’m pretty opinionated, especially with controversial topics. I support civil rights completely, think anyone who doesn’t is an asshole, but I tell them it’s their opinion. I can remember things that I learned YEARS ago, but I’ll forget to change the trash or wash the dishes the moment my dad tells me to do so. Woo, damn, I’m going hard and I’m not even halfway through with what I want to write.

          I’ll finish talking about myself later. Now I’m getting into what I really want to talk about, which I decided on about halfway through the paragraph above, which is opinions. What’s the answer to everything? (42) What’s my word on evolution? What should we do about school shootings? What do I think about abortion? Playstation or Xbox? (Playstation, obviously). What I say to that is, it’s your opinion. Your word is the law in your head. I’m not saying that everyone looks to me for my word, which they don’t, I’m just saying that enough people ask me what I think about everything for me to have to say that my thoughts do not matter. “But Kade,” They ask, “Do you not want to have a voice in the world? Do you not want your thoughts to be heard?” Not if people use what I say to backup what they’re saying. I don’t even need to say an example of what I’m saying. We’ve all had someone ask us something about an argument they’re having with someone, and whatever side your answer appeals to says “See?”. It annoys me to the point of having to write half a goddamn paper about it! Now, if we’re arguing about facts, then it’s different. One side will always be right when arguing about facts, and your word is meaningless unless it’s correct, whether it be about who was the vice-president under Franklin Pierce (who the fuck cares about that anyway?), or what someone had for breakfast that morning (I swear it was pancakes!). And music. Let whatever deity is real help me when someone asks me what music I like. Again your opinion. Some of my friends are the biggest hypocrites when it comes to opinions, music being the biggest thing. They’re the type of people who, like me, think that your opinion is your opinion and you’re entitled to it, but when I say that I don’t like Blink 182 or Green Day they call me a tasteless douchebag. So what if I prefer rap to rock? My opinion. Deal with it or go the hell away.

          I said something a few lines back that I feel like needs to be addressed so I don’t get ten comments saying that I need Jesus. Religion. Yet another controversial topic that a lot of people don’t know how to accept when others have a different viewpoint on it (And I realize that I said I wouldn’t talk about a controversial topic, but eh, screw it). Now, I know a lot of people are gonna say that religion is not an opinion, but a set-in-stone fact. Now, I’m Atheist, and I have put a lot of thought into it. I, like the (probable) majority of you, was born into Christianity, and I had no reason to doubt it. But when I was 8 or 9, my uncle gave me a book on how the world was formed, which stated that The Big Bang is what happened. The book never said anything to doubt Christianity, but it did plant doubt in my mind, which grew into, you guessed it, me turning Atheists. Some would probably argue that had that book not been given to me I wouldn’t have the viewpoints I have today, and I think they’re right. I don’t think that fate is set in stone, and you make your own path. But that’s not relevant. So, to me, religion is an opinion… Sort of. If you ask anyone what their opinion on religion is, they’ll probably say they have no doubt about it. So I’m gonna ask everyone reading this a question: If you have no doubt about your religion, and a Hindu has no doubt, who’s correct? Both sides would probably say themselves, and they have no reason not to. Now, I’m gonna ask another question: Were you born into your faith? Since you can’t, you know, actually respond right now I’m just going to go ahead and assume that the strong majority of you said yes. One final question: What if you were born into a completely different faith? Christian to Hindu, Jewish to Buddhist, so on and so forth. If you were born into a different faith altogether, would you still believe that your current beliefs are positive? Probably not, unless you convert. Now, if you’re still reading and didn’t just write an angry comment and storm off to clutch your cross and pray, I want you to think about what I’m about to say. Is religion still a fact? Like I said, it’s a sorta-kinda opinion. “Kade,” You might be saying, “If that’s what you think, then why have you not said YOUR views?” Well, voice in my head, I was about to do just that. Like I said, I’m Atheist. That should mean that I believe that there’s no deity whatsoever and I can explain everything with some different reason, which I almost can (Fun fact: the actual definition of Atheism has nothing to do with evolution). But I never said that I didn’t believe in a deity. Here’s my beliefs. I think that evolution formed the world and everything that we’ve come to know and love (Even, *sigh* One Direction). I don’t think that a deity had anything to do with it. Notice that I keep saying “think”. That’s because, even with all the proof that I’ve been given, I can’t honestly be sure that a god didn’t form the universe by means of evolution. I guess you could place me more in Agnosticism than anything.

          Okay, kinda tapped out on that subject for now. By the way, whoever reviews this, don’t tell me about all my errors, such as me saying “kinda” rather than “kind of”. I do it on purpose. When I write, I try to put my voice into it so it doesn’t feel like I’m a boring American Lit teacher giving a lecture. I write how I talk.

          Okay, now what to write about? I guess I could stop here and just be done with it, go out on a high note, start a flame war in the comments, let people get pissed off over one guy having his own opinions. I’m just gonna do that. You know what? When I started this I had no intention of writing my own novel, but I’m starting to want to do just that. So be on the lookout for that, I guess.

          When you’re reviewing, because you know you want to, tell me what a good subject to write about would be, and if you’d like to see more works in an opinion format like this one.

P.S. If I offended anyone in anyway, please don't take it like that anymore, as it was never my intention to do so. This is just the way I talk and the way I think, which is usually sarcasm and rude humor.


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Sun Feb 22, 2015 11:52 pm
Rin321 wrote a review...



Hello ChocolateLlama! CHRISSY321 here with a great review! :D

*Happy Review Day!* :D :D :D

I think that even though you had writers block- you did good! I agree and find that doing just this can help you out of it! I think that if you write the characters profile it helps you because it gives you ideas I want to write. I just love how you were honest and then and the character seems to be average kid and I love how sarcastic you were about watching football it was really funny! You did a great job and you do not offend anyone(at least in my opinion) because all you did was try to get out of your writers block annual review included a great character! I hope that you use this character to create a really good story! :D :D :D

I hope this feedback helps cause now I think you known this but did not know how much it helps! I always knew this and help but I do not really try now that I am sort of reminded I'm going to try it! Thank you so much for sharing I Love this!

I have one question though is this character somehow related to you or did you just randomly come up with all the traits or just take some from your self?

Once again I think you did good, and I think that this will go far please take my suggestion turn this into a story with a character in it! I think you'll come up with something really funny and I would love to read and review it? I grately encourage you to keep writing! :D :D






Thanks for the review, but the character I was talking about was indeed myself. I don't know if you realized that or not, and I'm just saying because your comment seems to sound like you thought I was just creating a random person. But thanks for the review. It means a lot



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No problem! :D



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Heyo Chocolate, Flite here for a review/comment/whatever you want this to be, this is certainly an interesting piece of work to see your mind at work. I'm actually just here to point out that, shall you ever feel the urge to say about something, anything personal, we do have a blog section that a lot of YWSers frequent. As this piece seems more suited to a blog than really a work itself, and it's also free so it doesn't cost you any points.

Ok, so moving onto the word itself. You told us not to comment on your spelling and rather tell you what to write about so I'm going to give you my two cents. I've noticed that this was basically an introduction to who you are, your hobbies, interest and so on. There is a massive paragraph with a survey-like format, your style of writing says a lot about your personality though it's hard to what's going on without proper formatting.

So, paragraphs would be a really good thing like separating it into smaller chunks. I also feel that we're not getting that much of an insight into you as a personal, these are all just very superficial things about you. There's a lot of different snippets that floats in the air, but there's nothing tying them down. I'd actually say focus on one thing that you care passionately about or really want to have a say on it, and base your article around that. Don't get me wrong here, I like the voice and the flair you contain though it's best to reduce it to a smaller size so people can actually see it.

All the best.

-Flite




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Tue Feb 17, 2015 2:59 am
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Hey! Dustbunny here!
Since we're all being bluntly honest here can i just say that i'm just reviewing so i can get points and post stuff? Ah, yes that feels good :)
Don't worry i'm not gonna go and diss all your opinions and thoughts either, because this is a review! Sort of... My only thing about your whole essay was, what was the point? You start off asking what to write, and then go into a, can i say rant? A rant about you and then your opinions and religion and then at the end come back to asking what you could write about. I actually think this would be an excellent piece if throughout you keep bringing up stuff about what you could write. For instance, you kind of suggest to yourself that you write about your opinions or your beliefs. Then at the end come back to it and bring everything around say, perhaps, just by writing you solve your own problem about what to write.
Now that's a review taking everything as a story and not an actual question. If you wanted an idea about what to write? I honestly don't know what you like to write or what all your preferences are, but you could always continue something based off of what you have here. Write something about your experiences being a christian turned atheist, delve into that. You seem to be passionate about how people view others opinions. I myself am a christian person, and one thing I've noticed among many atheists is that they seem passionate about their opinions, and get especially ticked when other people try and dismiss those thoughts and ideas of yours. I think everyone can learn to listen and be open minded about things.
And hey, i'm not a lit teacher either, and unless you're writing to one, theirs no need to sound like one, i found that your whole essay flowed very well, it was modern. I felt like i was standing next to you talking, so good job!






Well thanks, that means a lot to me. Don't worry, that's why I review to, so I'm not hurt. But really this is just what happens when I start thinking. I just kinda go off into a rant in my own mind. I didn't really ave a point to this, I just felt like writing.



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Hey! Dustbunny here!
Since we're all being bluntly honest here can i just say that i'm just reviewing so i can get points and post stuff? Ah, yes that feels good :)
Don't worry i'm not gonna go and diss all your opinions and thoughts either, because this is a review! Sort of... My only thing about your whole essay was, what was the point? You start off asking what to write, and then go into a, can i say rant? A rant about you and then your opinions and religion and then at the end come back to asking what you could write about. I actually think this would be an excellent piece if throughout you keep bringing up stuff about what you could write. For instance, you kind of suggest to yourself that you write about your opinions or your beliefs. Then at the end come back to it and bring everything around say, perhaps, just by writing you solve your own problem about what to write.
Now that's a review taking everything as a story and not an actual question. If you wanted an idea about what to write? I honestly don't know what you like to write or what all your preferences are, but you could always continue something based off of what you have here. Write something about your experiences being a christian turned atheist, delve into that. You seem to be passionate about how people view others opinions. I myself am a christian person, and one thing I've noticed among many atheists is that they seem passionate about their opinions, and get especially ticked when other people try and dismiss those thoughts and ideas of yours. I think everyone can learn to listen and be open minded about things.
And hey, i'm not a lit teacher either, and unless you're writing to one, theirs no need to sound like one, i found that your whole essay flowed very well, it was modern. I felt like i was standing next to you talking, so good job!





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— Emily Bronte, Wuthering Heights