Young Writers Society

Somehow, I read the title and got surprised when it was actually about a toast. Haha...it's really simple and pretty funny actually. Nevertheless, I have to say I thought it was great. Clever and cute. I think you took something that gets such little thought and wrote something every human being can relate to....and managed to rhyme at that. Great piece, I enjoyed it very much. Planning on reading more of your work.

I giggled a bit at this, hehe.
Well written, simplistic, and quite relatable! (I'm afraid of loud noises)
I especially like the non capitalized, casual type.
A job very well done, keep it up.

Hahaha, fun poem! It's cute. Although personally, I have never been bothered by my toaster, since it just gives a little popping sound. It's the BLENDER that really gets on my nerves. :/ It's like some horrible machine (which it is, technically)

Just one thing: You forgot to capitalise the letters at the beginning of each line and the "I" in the middle of the second line. It's really important to do that, you know.

Keep it up!

Mysticalxx

Your poem LOOKS like a piece of toast 0.0

Or is that just me

Ah, toast.

Okay, sorry I didn't get to comment longer. I replied to a post but didn't get to say what I wanted to.

I can relate to everything this poem says, except for the first line (I think death is a natural fear of humankind). One day I was getting a knife (which happens to be right next to the toaster) and the bread just popped up and I SCREAMED. I think a mini heart attack would be the best way to put it.

To be honest, I don't like toasters.

can't you just be classic and toast them over a fire? It doesn't make you scream when it finishes.

I agree with this.

-wisegirl22

Uh, that noise. Loved the poem though! Super relatable.

Yeah, that mini heart attack you always get. Great fun poem!

Hey there, ChocolateCello! cleverclogs here for a quick review!

I'm pretty sure that just about everyone can relate to that awful sound that the toaster makes when the toast is done, which makes this poem very funny and relatable. The rhymes aren't forced, and I love how it makes its point so quickly. It's short and sweet. I really only have two comments about this.

1. Why exactly did you choose to not capitalize or punctuate? It's unusual for this type of poem. It's not a bad choice, but I'm just curious as to why you made it.

2.

is the little sound the toaster makes

Hi, I think this is quite a fun little poem. I think as far as rhyme and choice of vocabulary goes there's nothing that needs changing, it reads well and has a nice flow to it. The only thing that this could possibly benefit from is some punctuation. I would consider adding a comma at the end of the first line. I was going to suggest more, but on reading it through again actually further punctuation isn't really necessary. Anyway, I enjoyed it, the ending really made me smile.

AHHH, I get it now!

Hey, Will here with a short review.

It took me a while. I must admit, it did. But I got there in the end.

Spoiler! :

Because you know, you're worried if the toast is burnt...

is the little sound the toaster makes