i wish to write, i wish to fish.

Hi, hello there! This is Ina speaking. I am here to write a quick comment/review.

I think this poem is vet clever yet kind of sad. Every day you try to fish, you try to write yet still have nothing. But the more you try and to the more you do it the more you will learn. Just like what people inspire you say, "never give up." I also love how the poem was written. It might've been fun for you and the background being white turning into black as if the sun was set. I can see a person on a beach with a notebook in one hand, and a fishing rod on the other. The person sighs as they don't catch anything or write in their notebook, no matter how much they try, there's still nothing.

Thank you for sharing such a clever yet sad poem. Have a good morning, day, afternoon, or night.

I'm back XD

Hey, Carina! How are you? Please tell me that I'm making you cringe cause this is old! Or don't! Cause looking at old writing is the cringiest thing ever sometimes! So maybe this was a bad idea! But here I am anyways, still typing up this review for you today! XDDDD

If I find another Carina product, I will request approval first, deal?

Writing is like fishing, something that I think you expertly explored here. We fish for ideas, for the right words, in a manner of speaking, but different kinds of bait bring different kinds of fish. That only explains my comprehension, though-- that does nothing to truly critique the masterpiece that you have excellently crafted. I think I would be right to assume that your bait was quite exquisite and tangible, something that all of the little fish and all of the big fish would come together to snatch.

It's disappointing and yet realistic-- just like in "a form of art founded on rules"-- that the narrator fails and struggles along their path to create their story, to string those words together, to violate everything they know to create that one true figurative Rembrandt, their own Last Supper, their own David-- it takes a lot out of the writer and the narrator alike, and the people reading this, for they all know that such is the luck of many writers in many places! To fail is to be human, though to be human does not mean that one will fail.

I think that might not make sense cause I am currently on a philosophy brain cause reasons so if I need to practice talking like a normal person, let me know XD

I hope you have a magnificent [*insert time of day here*]!!! <3<3<3

omg you have a THING for poems like this!! :0

so pwetty

also "they tell me that writing is a form of art founded on rules" is so nice asjdhalfh *chef's kiss*

I love this! It’s just like how a writer feels when he/she is experiencing a writer’s block.
can you please tell me how you did the whole picture thing? I really want to use this on my poems too

Hey! Just wanted to say this is really good and I think it describes the mindset of a writer very well. It's so relatable. Also I like this transition of color at the end

I absolutely adore this.
And the visual at the end...ugh just so amazing. So. Amazing.
I read this every day you know xD I always come back it. That's a rarity for me
Excellent work!

hey there .
wow i'd have to say it is a great poem.
and please do correct me if I am wrong.
but i believe it speaks of procrastination , about how we always find an excuse not to do something.
you could have thought about the worms from day one, or the fact that your fishing in a dead lake.
it also speaks about an overthinking mind,
so much to say but your lost for words?

That is awesome. Ohmigersh.

It's so.... beautiful. Wow.

This is - I just -.......

uh. <3

Marry me.

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This is a work of brilliant art. : )

I have no words for this. A poem hasn't affected me like this for a long time. <3

I almost don't want to review it because of it's near-perfection as regards the style. Carina this was absolutely wonderful; the whole time you managed to maintain the slow degradation of your punctuality and your overall control of the piece - in turn showing that you had all the control. I hope that makes sense

I think that the idea of the fish being the words you need, right there and yet somehow - unfairly - out of reach, is a great metaphor for writer's block. I found it really relatable and I guess that's the main reason I got into it. I once described a writer's mind as a cavern where the stalactites are ideas waiting to crash home. That also made this piece relatable to me; it made me think about my own writing and not giving up and all that motivational mumbo jumbo, which I appreciated because it's probably the kick in the bum I needed! Thank you!

I think the slightest bit of improvement you could possibly achieve in this piece of art is to overdo the breakdown even more; maybe you could work at this from different angles, like changing the fonts to see if any suit the confusion better, or maybe try some misspelled words or something... I don't know. That's not the way to improve, that's just showing how you could approach this in different ways. The way you could improve, as I said, is to overdo the breakdown; talk about the line breaking, or the rod slipping out of your hand, or catching the fish only to get too excited and let it escape again, or accidentally kicking the bucket of bait over. Make it a bit more... just more. I loved it, and I can in no way complain about it, I'm just racking my brain trying to think of a possible improvement. I understand if you don't want to make it 'more', because this also has the element of being truthful as regards simplicity. The words are there. You have the rod. You have the bait. And there's just nothing biting. It's so simple that more might ruin it, but as I said it's just about different angles. Maybe it would ruin it, but there's also the chance that it could make it ten times better. I loved how you went from white to black, like you were sinking deeper into the depths of confusion and the despair of creative malfunction, like the light of inspiration was slowly dwindling away. I loved the whole breakdown, and because of my slight OCD, I loved the way you centered 'tomorrow.' at the end.

Overall, it was brilliant, and I urge you to try to be this diverse in the future. Even with pieces that aren't a completely new breed of style like this one, even with pieces as clichéd as Arnold Schwarzenegger's script for every movie, please try to introduce this creative spark you're showing here. I've seen too many talents waste away in bland scribbles. For some reason ( ) I don't think that there's any chance of that happening here.

Your imagination is the key element of your writing; it's not always about the best descriptions or the best plots, it is - however - always about making an impact. This did, and I hope to see just as much effort in your future pieces. Thanks for the change, and the newness, and the absolute gorgeous piece that you've blessed my memory with.

Yours in ink,
TS.

This is stunning. Oh my goodness. I wish I could like it a million times. <333

wow!!! That is so cool how you did that transitions, its like you are actually on the boat fishing! i loved how the way you described things. this was really really great.


One thing tho, i didnt understand the whole changing the font, i mean i kinda understood, you were trying to do different stanzas. i think you could have done this someother way.

But really i thought this was really good, one more question is what happened to the sea, i thought she was in a dead lake. anywho... it still was fantastic. lol my dad fishes ALOT.
Maddie

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