Broken heart and a broken kitchen side. (name edited)

I haven't reviewed in a while, so apologies for the scrapiness.

This is a poem, I believe. At least this is what I get from it. Just by looking at the lines there is an inconsistency with your words. Are there rhyming lines? Are there particular themes/issues you wish to share? At the moment it seems...well empty. I am afraid there is no nice way of pointing this out: this isn't very good.

The title
Now, what the heck is going on? You have a giant contrast between something ordinary and something very unneccesary. The inclusion of "broken heart" makes it sound as if we want sympathy, yet is a cheesy title. It is a cliche which begs to be heard one last time. Then, what the heck is up with "broken kitchen side"? Does this character have violent tendencies? Do they break sides of kitchens whenever they are angry? I am really not sure what is going on, even by the title. The fact that this title is an edit as well makes it seem even more confusing- your original title was fine. Now it is just confusing.

The poem itself
Let's go through this poem bit by bit.

Liar Liar
Cheater Cheater

This is childish. Already the seriousness of this poem has been affected. It isn't subtle either.

Thats how I feel about you
You should be on the reciving end for once.

The correct word is recieving. You need to spell check.

You broke my heart and I forgave because I loved you.
I have never loved any one as much as I did.

Hang on a minute- why do these lines have full stops, as the first three don't have any? That is a lack of consistency within the poem itself. There is virtually no flow within any of the stanzas. There seems to be no structure. To be honest, I feel nothing towards this narrator. The very first lines make me lose all realism of time or place. This character is simply moaning. And I should care because...? You use little descriptive techniques as well, leaving the language repetitious and appallingly bland.

But you should think before you post, I know you said "its just on here" about her.
I know thats what it could have been but when you posted about it when i was online it broke my heart.

Whoa, whoa, whoa. WAY too much things in these two lines. You've switched location now? It's over the internet, right? You should at least make an effort to actually link the stanzas together. It feels more like something that was written in 2 minutes on some scrappy paper. It's like a school project in three sentences, probably written on the bus on the way. It is a mess of ideas and is extremely boring to say the least. Again, no rhyme. And no rhythm. And no flow. And the change of narrator, I presume, adds to this confusion.

Liar Liar
Cheater Cheater

Out of all lines to not repeat, you choose this one. And why? To remind the reader that the narrator is incredibly childish and can't take anything? In fact, why repeat a single line at all?

I loved you and I would have died for you but that's now how I feel about you.

Surprise, surprise. Long line again. No consistency. Very strong, affectionate words for someone who acts like a child (at least the narrator seems like it). Is this person pretending? I dunno. Your narrator is so ambiguous that you may not even know who they are. And this is a problem.

I thought I loved you.

Don't repeat in any future poems of yours. Take note of this: never repeat stanzas on the level you have wrote them.

Overall
Why should I care about a generic, bland and overused stereotype? It also happens to be confused. What age is this narrator? What is going to happen next? Why do you repeat awful lines? I am sorry for my bluntness but I am sorry: I simply don't like it at all. Your other poems aren't exactly a step-up either, but at least they have one bland idea in it. This is a collection of bland ideas. Guess which is worse. You call yourself a writer? Sure, you can write, but to be a writer you must have more. You have literally nothing to offer. To quote a review of another one of your works, this is just a pathetic excuse.

1/5