nature of the fields

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4revgreen
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Hey, Che here for a quick review :-)
First off, I honestly loved this poem. It was just written extremely well and flows so well. The imagery is so strong and emotive!
I loved the structure, especially the enjambment and caesuras in places. They just really added to the overall effect of the pieces.
It made me want to have someone call me their favourite bumble me and bunny, I'm kind of jealous, aha.
I can't find anything to critique at all, except maybe the quotes and the beginning and end should start with capital letters but that's just me being very pedantic :-)
I just really loved this poem so much! You have such a natural way with words

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FruityBickel
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okay first of all this is very gay

second of all i love you love bunny

third of all let's review

first of all to me the imagery in this is astounding in its simplicity. I imagine a field with a shady tree as the stage on which the romance takes place. The talk about the insects really brings the image to life.

I particularly love the line 'scars left behind by the shrapnel long gone'. It really illustrates the state that both parties are in.

I also love how it's hinted that the couple are lgbt without outright explicitly stating it.

all in all this was very romantic and sweet and i love you so much

ok im done for now byyyyeeee



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