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Black Rain

by Bloodlord


On this day 73 years ago, the USA dropped the atomic bombĀ Little Boy, which detonated ~ 600 m above Hiroshima, Japan, killing 80,000 people. Black rain is the nuclear fallout that falls from the sky after the bombing like rain (except it is black). This poem is my response to this atrocious and controversial event.

I

The rain had come

and it was black.

Children cried,

the fires burned,

and the rain

singed the ashes.

Tyranny rose,

civilization fell,

with the darkened skies.

II

The rain had come

and it was black.

The black rain passed.

And so did the people.

Thousand by thousand

they departed forever.

III

The rain had come

and it was black.

How many years

of iniquity

before the people learn?

How many lives

swept away

by the winds of war?

As rain fell

that fateful day,

the pride,

the hope,

the will,

of a people

was crushed.

IV

The rain had come

and it was black.

And a nation fell.

But the fallen

will always

rise again.

Brick by brick,

soul by soul,

was the nation

rebuilt.

V

The rain had come

and it was black.

A people suffered,

a people feared,

a people torn,

but not defeated.

The rain had come.

It was black.

But the peopleĀ 

emerged strong.


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Mon Aug 20, 2018 8:36 pm
RandomxStoryteller wrote a review...



Hello Bloodlord!!

This poem is really great, and I've read it three times over and it still brings tears to my eyes. I really like the repeated line because it brings a lot of emotion into the poem and it also really sets the tone of the poem even more. I also really like the final stanza "V". It really symbolizes the mistakes that some people made had consequences innocent people suffered for. This is AWESOME! Keep doing whatever you're doing because it's right and makes your writing amazing!

-RandomxStoryteller




Bloodlord says...


Thank you so much!!



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Tue Aug 07, 2018 4:05 pm
Dossereana says...



Grate work I love this poem. :D :D :D




Bloodlord says...


Thanks!



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Tue Aug 07, 2018 4:48 am
Eros wrote a review...



Hey there, bloodlord !!

This is Eros here with a review for you !!

I liked this piece of poetry of yours !!!
I loved the way you have described the bomb blasts and the way you have used many different words for describing the situation...

I like the variety of words that makes the poem interesting and not boring at all.
I also liked the repeated use of the line,

The rain had come

and it was black.


I loved it, because it gives it a real poetic effect.

I also loved the way you have used short stanzas and broken the lines into smaller, poetic ones.


This stanza,

The rain had come

and it was black.

How many years

of iniquity

before the people learn?

How many lives

swept away

by the winds of war?

As rain fell

that fateful day,

the pride,

the hope,

the will,

of a people

was crushed.


This stanza just says it all.

Loved it. The way you have described the pains, the suffering everything is simply AWESOME.

GREAT JOB...

keep writing such beautiful and interesting...and awesome poetries and other stuff, and we would love to keep reading them and reviewing them..

Have a great day / night !!

With love,
Eros.




Bloodlord says...


Thanks so much for this review!



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Tue Aug 07, 2018 3:08 am
Bloodlord says...



Hi all;

I wrote this poem a few minutes ago, so this is the first draft I have come up with. Any help regarding the coherence of the meter and themes or anything else you find would be really great!





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