On this day 73 years ago, the USA dropped the atomic bomb Little Boy, which detonated ~ 600 m above Hiroshima, Japan, killing 80,000 people. Black rain is the nuclear fallout that falls from the sky after the bombing like rain (except it is black). This poem is my response to this atrocious and controversial event.
I
The rain had come
and it was black.
Children cried,
the fires burned,
and the rain
singed the ashes.
Tyranny rose,
civilization fell,
with the darkened skies.
II
The rain had come
and it was black.
The black rain passed.
And so did the people.
Thousand by thousand
they departed forever.
III
The rain had come
and it was black.
How many years
of iniquity
before the people learn?
How many lives
swept away
by the winds of war?
As rain fell
that fateful day,
the pride,
the hope,
the will,
of a people
was crushed.
IV
The rain had come
and it was black.
And a nation fell.
But the fallen
will always
rise again.
Brick by brick,
soul by soul,
was the nation
rebuilt.
V
The rain had come
and it was black.
A people suffered,
a people feared,
a people torn,
but not defeated.
The rain had come.
It was black.
But the people
emerged strong.
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Hello Bloodlord!!
This poem is really great, and I've read it three times over and it still brings tears to my eyes. I really like the repeated line because it brings a lot of emotion into the poem and it also really sets the tone of the poem even more. I also really like the final stanza "V". It really symbolizes the mistakes that some people made had consequences innocent people suffered for. This is AWESOME! Keep doing whatever you're doing because it's right and makes your writing amazing!
-RandomxStoryteller
Thank you so much!!
Grate work I love this poem.
Thanks!
Hey there, bloodlord !!
This is Eros here with a review for you !!
I liked this piece of poetry of yours !!!
I loved the way you have described the bomb blasts and the way you have used many different words for describing the situation...
I like the variety of words that makes the poem interesting and not boring at all.
I also liked the repeated use of the line,
I loved it, because it gives it a real poetic effect.
I also loved the way you have used short stanzas and broken the lines into smaller, poetic ones.
This stanza,
This stanza just says it all.
Loved it. The way you have described the pains, the suffering everything is simply AWESOME.
GREAT JOB...
keep writing such beautiful and interesting...and awesome poetries and other stuff, and we would love to keep reading them and reviewing them..
Have a great day / night !!
With love,
Eros.
Thanks so much for this review!
Hi all;
I wrote this poem a few minutes ago, so this is the first draft I have come up with. Any help regarding the coherence of the meter and themes or anything else you find would be really great!