Young Writers Society

Hello! This poem is absolutely amazing! It’s a very creative and exprecive way to describe the moon. I’ve never actually thought of the moon as a ‘Silver Queen’ before unroll I read your poem.

Over all, I think you did very well. Although, I do agree with TurboEnhancedDragon on this one. There is some roughness to some of the lines and the transitions between the different stanzas could have been a bit smoother especially with the first two. But over all it was still a very good read regardless.

This poem is beautiful and the moon is beautiful. I really enjoyed your eloquent use of metaphors and descriptive language! It took me a moment at first to realize that each line alternates between 8 syllables and 6 syllables.

When reading it out loud the switch between the first and second stanzas felt somewhat awkward. the first and second stanzas alone are both beautiful, but the transition between them is a bit rough. Also, with the word beneath, while reading out loud, it feels smoother if it was changed to 'neath, but it also breaks the 8 6 8 6 pattern, so it's your call there.

overall this poem is beautiful, and personally makes me happy to read it. (Especially since I love the moon.) I actually wish this poem was longer!

Keep up the fantastic work, I hope to see more of your writing!

I love this so much! . It's so mysterious and uniquely written. This is seriously an awesome poem!