Young Writers Society

Hey, there. Here for a quick review

I'm loving all of the capitalization and exclamation points!

"Post-modernism on Karl Marx's grave
Post-modernism on fuckie-offie lane
Post-modernism on the edge of the town
Oxford Street is crowded with frowns and shrouds"
This chorus (is it the chorus?) is pure gold. Really enjoyed this one.

I like how you manage to take real-life events or historical figures and contort them into these lovely, outrageous lyrics. *claps* It takes a brave soul to put their lyrics out there, because no one really knows what the rhythm or intention is. It's all based on the meaning and the words themselves.

I reviewed the "Scarecrow Boogie Dance," that was in the green room. You are quite something. You show comical, lyrical talent, and it's like a breath of fresh air! (Especially on review day...)

Happy writing,

Kali Lennon

Hello, steampowered here for a review and to get this out of the Green Room! To be honest I’m not really sure how I’m supposed to review this and what kind of reaction you’re trying to go for here, but I’ll try my best.

Well, what can I say? This was certainly… interesting. It made slightly more sense than the last work of yours I reviewed, but I have to admit I was a little… lost. Do you have a tune in mind for this, and what kind of music would it be? I’m guessing it’s probably not mainstream…

This feels like an excited piece of music, and I can kind of imagine someone screaming those lines in all caps. I mean, it still doesn’t make a whole lot of sense, but then again some of Queen’s songs (such as Bohemian Rhapsody) don’t seem to make a huge amount of sense and they’re still popular. (I mean, I suppose you could analyse Bohemian Rhapsody, the same as you could analyse anything else, but I believe Freddy Mercury said it wasn’t supposed to make a lot of sense…)

I ate it like a monkey sod
Until it became a tiny little pod

Auntie Farty has some massive sheers

I AM VERY UNIMPRESSED!

Hi,

No idea what to say! Honestly! And I am not really getting a clear sense either you love shopping or not (you probably do like).. um.. you know, never mind! Well I guess you just had a bad experience of shopping and you just expressed the wit or feelings and Well I am not getting a clear view of everything though it but a really out of the box poetry you did I guess. Just work on rhythmic pattern and I hope you are good at rap!

Oh by the way it is a super duper type of composition, keep it up. GOOD LUCK. And see ya!!

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