Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for language.
The last time I saw annexation
Chamberlain had an umbrella up his arse
Now the tables have turned!
You little minx!
The last time I ordered a sammich
Was in 65 million BC
Where dinosaurs had selfie sticks!
When they all fucking died!
Go back to your hole
Go back to your gym
Go back to a land
Where knives sing hymns
And break hips for hulahoops
Who have ice ring donut wings
WITH
A
Z!!!
The last time I saw annexation
Chamberlain had an umbrella up his arse
Now the tables have turned!
You little minx!
Go back to your hole
Go back to your gym
Go back to a land
Where knives sing hymns
And break hips for hulahoops
Who have ice ring donut wings
WITH
A
Z!!!
The last time I ordered a sammich
Was in 65 million BC
Where dinosaurs had selfie sticks!
When they all fucking died!
Go back to your hole
Go back to your gym
Go back to a land
Where knives sing hymns
And break hips for hulahoops
Who have ice ring donut wings
WITH
A
Z!!!
I love your poem! I'm guessing it was meant to be slightly crazy, and nonsensical. But I like the sense in that...strangely. It was funny how you repeated the verses 3 times... maybe to emphasise your point???
This poem is so ambiguous maybe you just made it so us reviewers can look stupid trying to understand it. I have no idea why, but I liked its nonsense I guess.
Tick tock
What up? Box#10 here to give a review, take it or leave it.
First of all, I must remark, the overall tone of the song(?) is so cheerful that I don't want to criticize it. And whatever I say, must have already foreseen, posting something as nonsensical as this.)
But it is that, nonsensical. The words, certainly, are very bright. This is a rainbow of a song(?).
That said, I do not get it. To me it seems like you were grasping at straws to come up with language to fit whatever tune you sing this to in your head.
"And break hips for hulahoops
Who have ice ring donut wings"
^^This is mainly what I'm talking about.
Sorry if this was a bit harsh, like I said, take it or leave it.
I did like this bit, though...
"Was in 65 million BC
Where dinosaurs had selfie sticks!
When they all fucking died!" 
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