Hi Bethany Marie Wright!! I really love this poem, it literally brought tears to my eyes. It seems that you have been through quite a bit, don't take this wrongly by the way. I really love every bit of this poem but I have to say that my favorite bit, is one of the most simplistic lines, from the structure (enjambment) and the actual language:
"For the truth to be wrong." This screams denial, mixed messages and mind games. It's that moment where the indifference of reality carries so much authenticity and it's completely unbearable. It's painful, I think you really enhanced the emotions really well. I was listening to Skinny Love by Birdy and it just made the effect of the poem 10 times emotional. I love this poem. I was drawn in by the title active immediately. I tend to be attracted to read poems which are sad, as it really helps me understand what people are going through. I feel the compassion from reading it. It's almost as if you've been through it, which makes it better. This poem literally read my mind and inspired me to want to write similarly to you. The use of caesura and enjambment is on point. I am just in awe. You could be my physiological twin as this is just what goes through, it's the way in which you've written it that makes it more worthwhile. WELL DONE
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