Tiny Epiphanies

Hello, Hikari here with a review!

Aw this was so sweet and I totally relate to this especially when the person is so interesting and you just want to know every little detail me and I right?

And it doesn't matter how many years it takes to know everything about them because you want to, have to!

But anyways it seems you have a really good friendship or relationship? with this person (I'm not too good at telling between these lines haha)

Anyways I enjoyed this poem, kudos ❤

I think you just put into words something lots of people have experienced. And put into really beautiful words I must say. I love how it starts as a list that could be about anyone, or many people the author has met, and then at the end it turns into a story. I love that you brought back the hair flipping at the end, connecting the person at the door with all the descriptors from before. I like this because I feel like instead of talking about the passion or spark of a relationship like a lot of poems do, it highlights the soft little things that people notice. That overtime make a person special to you. Great work!

This is beautiful, thank you for sharing. Honestly this inspires me to want to write a gratitude list

I loved the layout. It is so simple, but it gets the job done and it’s juts awesome. I love hearing your voice. I love how you can list things without making it sound like a list. The last part is really beautiful <3<3<3<3

“I called you to tell you I loved you

And you were already at the door,

Flipping your hair

And saying

I love you, too”

I really enjoyed reading. Thank you very much!
Ellie <3

Hi, I'm Avis, here to give a review!

To start: I really, really loved this poem. There's something so comforting about the simplicity of all the little examples you cited that make it feel real. From "Or that you hate the smell of lilies" to "That you flip your hair like a horses's mane" they showed that the speaker truly knows that person that love. And the way you call each of these things "tiny epiphanies" is so sweet. Love isn't always dramatic gestures and incredible feats, but, as this beautiful poem shows, it's in the little details, the "tiny epiphanies" as you get to know someone.

The structure of the poem, although technically inconsistent, flows beautifully. Normally I like poems better with a steady rhythm, but you've embraced a more dynamic style and it works really well. The lines not only flow and transition easily, but the poem has a way of pulling the reader along between each idea.

One tiny nitpick (that honestly isn't that important) is the punctuation. I know that sometimes poets chose not to add punctuation (including myself), but after some lines, before moving to another topic (for example: after "Ben") you could consider adding a period. It's also totally your decision. The only place that it actually bothers me, though, is at the very end, after "I love you, too," because I think a period could help the end feel a little more finished (still your choice though!).

Overall, I thought this was beautiful, and although I don't have a LOT of experience in the matter, I can relate to the simple joy of learning "tiny epiphanies" about the people you care about. Thank you! ^-^