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Monday, March 2nd, 2015

Dear Diary

Today I never thought I would ever think this but I'm glad that I tried out for track. This change of heart occurred when I found out that the boys Rugby teem plays in the field we run around for warm up's. I also realized that despite the usual lack of enthusiasm I get from gym class, there are girls that like to do sports. Long story short I made the team and met some interesting people.

My friend Alex is captain because she in in 11th grade and know one else cared. Only problem is that she can be a little bit of a dictator. Ella, Piper, and Stacy are the other girls on the team. They accepted me as soon as I stepped foot on the field. 

Ella is fast and I mean really fast, and she skipped 9th grade. She died her hair red, and she has tan skin with dark blue eyes that look violet. Piper and Stacy are twins, they both have blond hair and green eyes and are both in 9th grade like me. They look like twin robots, the only reason I can tell them apart is because they have their names sewn onto their shirts.

I also got interviewed by Brook, she is the school's A.V club representative (reporter/gossip queen), I swear she can talk. She sits next to me in French and I'm glad that it's one of my better subjects. She is on the debate teem for a reason. She can be really persuasive at times and she can come on strong. I hope that she doesn't become a politician! That would be terrible for the government because two years ago she said that they should wear glitter on their uniforms! 

She said "Will Zack asks Lizzy to the dance next month? Do you think that they could be the next power couple? I need a BFF quote for my report on the school news tomorrow." Leave it to Brook to find a story inside my best friends personal life. I replied "No comment," this is a very standard response when talking to Brook. I hope that she doesn't ask Kimberly. She would start a rumor or two to keep life interesting. 

I get to go to the community gym because (Brian) Mark and Luke have a Basketball game and I promised that I would go. Alex, Liz and Kimberly are going too. I hope that they win today's game, they have been in a 9 month losing streak.

Wish them luck diary!

Jean Watson 

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Heya, Chrissy here for a review!

Okay, this is a really cool idea. I haven't seen many people do this. I shouldn't be able to find every much, but I'll do my best!

because she in in 11th grade and know one else cared.


Okay, IS in. And NO one else. And it should be CARES. :D

Both have blond hair and green eyes and are Both in 9th grade


A bit of redundancy. You say Both twice. You can just remove the second time, you don't need it.

they should wear glitter on their uniforms!



Glitter on their uniforms! Ewww... That sounds interesting, to say the least.

I get to go to the community gym because (Brian) Mark and Luke have a Basketball game and I promised that I would go.



I think that should "I have to go." Also at the end of the sentence get ride of the go. It is not needed.

in a 9 month losing streak.


Use the word nine, not 9.

Wish them luck diary!


Comma between Luck and Diary.

That's it! Can't find anything else to point out. *sniffs* You need to make more mistakes so I can rip to shreds. ;) jk.

Keep writing! :D

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Mercyecho Review

Good job! First of all I really like the idea of writing this from the view of her diary. I'm just going to be a little nitpicky with some grammatical errors, like when you said "know one else cared". And when you capitalized" basketball". Other than that I really i joyed reading this.
Keep it up, I hope to see more!
Mercyecho



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