This is the summary to the book I'm writing. Tell me what ya think, thanks!
April Johnson moved from Oakland California to Thomaston Georgia to live with her dad. Her mom died of what she thought was brain cancer. Her Brother Ryan comes to visit too, he is 19 and in college while April is 17 and a junior in high school. April makes new friends, and falls in love with Jake Owens. She comes home from a date with him when her world, that was just turning upright again, took a spiraling turn for the worst. There is a detective from Oakland wanting to talk to her and her family about her mother. Who apparently didn’t die, of brain cancer, but she was murdered. April doesn’t know what to do, doesn’t know who to turn too. She starts getting threaten phone calls, phone calls from the guy, as he says, killed her mom. All while this is going on her boyfriend, who recently confessed his love for her, is having family issues of his own, his dad, that abandoned him and his twin sister when they were just two, is back in town. Find out if April turns away from her loved ones, or goes to them for support while trying find out her mother’s killer in this riveting novel Unexpected.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
So this makes for a pretty intriguing piece here...its also a little bit like a cross between a summary and a blurb, cause especially towards the end it transforms into some very blurb like lines, but the majority of the start is like a summary. That observation side, at first glance, this sounds really interesting. There appears to be a lot of complex things going on here in this plot and it looks like there's set to be quite a few fun plot twists...which are always quite a bit of fun.
All in all, when you read through this summary you can see the potential for a pretty awesome story hidden in there, although whether the story itself turns out good does depend on the way that you capture these ideas in your writing. At the moment, on paper, this is great and it sounds like something I'd totally read. You seem to have a done of decent bit of planning here and some good worldbuilding. The character personalities don't really seem particularly fleshed out yet, but then is a summary so perhaps you just didn't include it.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Thank you so much ! (:
Sounds cool. Not quite my cup of tea, as far as genre, but then again, if it was witty and well-written, I'd pick it up. I say, go for it!