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Imperfections within Snow

by AndyS6


Look out the window and see the backyard. A backyard covered in a layer of untouched snow. It covers everything: the ground, the trees, the deck, the fence, and the roof. It makes everything look perfect and different. A good kind of different. People like the different. Looking back at the snow, it looks as if it is at peace. One can observe the like small soft bumps in the snow causing it to not be a completely perfectly flat surface. It gives it definition. It changes it. Even though the top layer is not touched or broken, there are still imperfections--imperfections deep down. The snow is not flat, it is not a perfect layer underneath. From observing it on the outside we can see perfection, but even within what we deem as ‘perfection” still has imperfections. One could say the bumps are the struggles of the person and it still shows that even in the idols we have and the people we deem as “perfect” still are human with: imperfections, struggles and problems. Even the snow is not truly perfect, so do not expect yourself to be perfect. You are you; with all your imperfections and flaws. Do not hate or dislike yourself for that. Everyone has them. Everyone has different struggles and pains. Do not be ashamed of yourself. Be yourself. Love yourself.


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Wed Sep 01, 2021 5:24 am
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Hey!!! Forever here with a very short review!!

Before Reading and after seeing the title and also the description : Quite interesting. What does this deal with? Is it with the inperfect shape of the snow or is it something concerning the fact that snow can change shape?

I had the above thoughts before and after reading it, I was like wow. Anyway, this was so good. I really liked the metaphor that you used. We rarely compare snow with humans. At least, I have nevee read or heard something specifying the same. And if I am not wrong, it's something about the appearance. Seems like there were many references especially the facade thing. As you deal with outer self and how good it looks in the outer side, it can definitely be related to a facade.

Now, seems like the snow loves itself whereas human beings don't. I snow don't want to take new form, it's okay with whatever it has but human beings aren't okay. So, they crave for a new form.

The essay/article had some minute grammatical mistakes though they can be fixed very easily. And maybe seperate the whole thing into paragraphs. That will make it easier to read. And now the category. Why did you suddenly put it under heath? That doesn't make sense. Maybe put it under realistic. That would be far better, I think.

All in all, I really liked it and I reviewed an essay after many days :D

Keep Writing!!

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Sun May 30, 2021 5:55 pm
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Hello!

This was a wonderful piece of work! It was strong, it was powerful and you can genuinely relate with it.

"It makes everything look perfect and different. A good kind of different. People like the different."

I love what you have implied over here. It's true, people crave the different, they long for the change it brings along with it as if somehow it can create the 'difference' they have been craving in their own lives too. Don't know if I made much sense to you!

"Even though the top layer is not touched or broken, there are still imperfections--imperfections deep down. The snow is not flat, it is not a perfect layer underneath. From observing it on the outside we can see perfection, but even within what we deem as ‘perfection” still has imperfections. One could say the bumps are the struggles of the person and it still shows that even in the idols we have and the people we deem as “perfect” still are human with: imperfections, struggles and problems. "

This was brilliant. We often regard snow as this perfect, pure element of nature and we welcome it with warm smiles. And yet this is the same snow that brings storms and buries towns. Nothing is perfect. We often compare ourselves with others, we are quick to judge and slow to forgive ourselves for our own mistakes. But sometimes, we forget that we are only human. And the differences that separate us should be celebrated because it is what makes us unique.

"Be yourself. Love yourself."

I loved the way you ended the paragraph. This whole piece is a lesson in itself and it teaches you to appreciate yourself. Well done. I don't think you could have written this any better.

So anyways, that's it. Have fun writing!




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Wed Dec 23, 2020 5:44 pm
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Wow! This shook me more than icy winds do!!
Wonderful message.
Hey there! Anne here for a review.

I loved your choice of words to write this. I feel the similar when I look at the moon, you know its the topic of poems so often treated as the perfect beautiful object sometimes. But if your vision is clear you can't miss the imperfections, the craters even with unaided eyes. And that thought had made me love my scars. So this was too relatable for me. In short, I loved it.

Even though the top layer is not touched or broken, there are still imperfections--imperfections deep down.

I love the metaphor here. More than often, people that appear perfect are the ones who have most negative e emotions. Or inner faults. Like voids in the snow. That seems to appear perfect.

One could say the bumps are the struggles of the person and it still shows that even in the idols we have and the people we deem as “perfect” still are human with: imperfections, struggles and problems

This was fabulous too. Yups, so true. However, we can't see that so we think it doesn't exist. Only yesterday, I was watching a video which was a call-out to people who are too obsessed with looks. They find themselves ugly and think that a handsome person will always be more successful due to his/her good looks. It said, and I totally agree, that you can't oversimplify the idea of success. It doesn't come just by a single trait. Fame as mentioned here. What we actually do by judging people that way is undermine their success and make an excuse for our negligible progress.

I like the message. Imperfection is the true perfection

Kudos to you to write so beautifully. :D
Keep writing because you're good at it.




AndyS6 says...


Thank you so much. I am so glad you like my message and what I was trying to get across. It was just a spur of the moment thought when looking out my window at the snow.

I couldn't agree more. We so often judge people by judging what we see and forget there is so much more to a person that what is visible to the eye--in a physical and metaphorical sense.



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Your welcome... Hmm so true!



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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here with a review!

First Impression: Well this seems like a really interesting piece. I'm not quite sure what category it even belongs to but I don't know if its an article or essay. But that's not really a big deal so there's no need to worry about that. The message here seems like a really good one on first glance and I do like the comparison that you made.

Anyway let's get right to it,

Look out the window and see the backyard. A backyard covered in a layer of untouched snow. It covers everything: the ground, the trees, the deck, the fence, and the roof. It makes everything look perfect and different. A good kind of different. People like the different. Looking back at the snow, it looks as if it is at peace. One can observe the like small soft bumps in the snow causing it to not be a completely perfectly flat surface. It gives it definition. It changes it. Even though the top layer is not touched or broken, there are still imperfections--imperfections deep down. The snow is not flat, it is not a perfect layer underneath. From observing it on the outside we can see perfection, but even within what we deem as ‘perfection” still has imperfections. One could say the bumps are the struggles of the person and it still shows that even in the idols we have and the people we deem as “perfect” still are human with: imperfections, struggles and problems. Even the snow is not truly perfect, so do not expect yourself to be perfect. You are you; with all your imperfections and flaws. Do not hate or dislike yourself for that. Everyone has them. Everyone has different struggles and pains. Do not be ashamed of yourself. Be yourself. Love yourself.


Alright, so I think this is a fantastic example here that you have used. The way that you relate the snow looking perfect and having imperfections really comes through here and I think it ties in really well to the point that you're trying to make. The advice at the end is also pretty nice, I think that's a wonderful message to be putting out there and it would do people a lot of good to think like that.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: Overall this was a really fun read and I like the idea that you tried to present. I think you did a pretty good job presenting it as well and it was something that was pretty nice to hear. Anyways I believe that's all I've got to say for this pretty short piece.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry




AndyS6 says...


Thank you. I am glad you enjoyed it. I don't know what category it is either lol. But I am glad the message was able to get across well. :)




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