This is a creative writing assignment of mine. I wasn't really sure how to edit it or what to do with it. Constructive Critisism will buy you one imaginary cookie of any flavor!
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I rather enjoyed this. It made me think. I agree with IcyFlame, I would replace the numbers with words. It would flow better with the style of the rest of the poem. Sorry, that's all I have. I really did like it though.
Good job,
Amber
Ooooh! Can i have a chocolote chip imaginary cookie?
You need a comma at the end of each line (unless it has a full stop).
I would use words instead of numbers and the word 'children' instead of 'kids'
Why is there a comma here?
That's all I've got