Sweet and Unspoken

by AmiiLightwood

Published June 17, 2011

In Poetry

I wake up every night
With your name upon my lips
Sweet and unspoken
Unrequited bliss
Turn around, look at me
Standing in amongst the crowd
Watching and waiting
Silently so proud
The pain you bring my heart
Is equal to the pleasure
Every breath you take -
Sweet beyond measure
Your dancing eyes sparkle
Like the sun's rays beaming down
Warming, uplifting
Sweep away my frown

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AmeliaCogin
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AmeliaCogin wrote a review Review · Jun 18, 2011

Hello. I'm Alia and I'll be reviewing for you today. Normally, I hate rhyming poetry. I find that the writers often forsake emotion and passion because they are so caught up trying to make their piece rhyme. However, I am very impressed by your piece. It had a lovely, gentle rhythm, and you thrust wonderful emotion into your poem. I loved it, and haven't any gramatical nitpicks. Well done! Keep up the good work, and *like*!
~ Alia

MisunderstoodDreamer commented Comment · Jun 18, 2011

This is so good! I love the rhyme scheme. Plusyou wrote it so well I can almost feel how it seemed you felt. Great job! Keep writing!

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Triskiller commented Comment · Jun 18, 2011

This is really sweet and very well written. I have really nothing else to say but: Keep writing!

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AmiiLightwood commented Comment · Jun 17, 2011

naww i love you aniwinchester - for liking my totally nonsensical poetry :)
what would i do without you?

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aniwinchester commented Comment · Jun 17, 2011

sooo good x



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