Listen as the wind flows and the water falls.
The wind whispers your name.
Hear as the bird calls.
Nothing is the same.
The Wolf cries to the Moon as the stars glimmer in the night sky.
Sadly it will end soon,
Leaves move with the moans of the wind.
Air sighs,
Dancing in the sky without end as the trees wither.
Feel as the wind whips your soul,
Pulling at invisible threads.
What keeps you whole,
Like tears shed.
Air as frigid as the night,
With light from above push with all it's might.
Like the mighty wings of a hummingbird.
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Hello AlmondEyes! I love this poem! I think it is very beautiful and nicely placed. I don't have any tips for you here. I thought it was very pretty. The only thing I was wondering was:
Feel as the wind whips your soul,
Pulling at invisible threads.
What keeps you whole,
Like tears shed.
What does this mean? Anyway, I really liked your poem. Keep writing and NEVER get discouraged.
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Thanks so much!! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!!
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I happen to really enjoy this poem. I love the way it flows together and how it is structured. I can see that you have edited it a bit from looking at the previous review, and I think that this is a very good poem. I think that its very figurative in some ways, and that can be really good when it comes to poetry. Its always nice to be able to read the same poem and yet have a different interpretation. My favorite line would have to be: "The Wolf cries to the Moon as the stars glimmer in the night sky."
Anyways, there doesn't seem to be much to nitpick about. Well done, and keep writing! I look forward to reading more of your works.
Thank you for you review! It means a lot that you enjoyed it. I really appreciate it. Tell your friends!! xD
I will, don't worry!
I'm not really good with poetry, so I don't know if I can review that part of it very accurately. I like your formatting, and the flow is pretty good. I think it's a little choppy in places.
I think you could almost omit the first line there, since it is a little redundant with the next line (which has a lot more imagery).
Speaking of imagery, I really like what you've got going with your word choice, and the ending line is spectacular in my opinion.
There were two grammatical errors that jumped out at me; the title for one. It should be "Nature in its beauty." No apostrophe.
The second-to-last line is the same way.
Anyways, nice poem!!! Keep up the good work
*Kisses cheek* :3