On a bright morning, in the distant future
Robo and I play chess for the hundredth time
I lose as always, without a frown
"Still can't register how defeat doesn't affect
the likes of you, an international master"
My AI robot asks once again, as it always does
Over the years, the answer hasn't changed
"All I play for is to have a good time
To entertain myself & unwind from work"
"I don't get you sometimes, master
Who can play a competitive game
For anything other than to win"
Says Robo, my little robot friend
"I don't think you'll ever understand"
I pat my only pal's head
Standing up, I begin drifting to my world
"Writing another poem today?", it questions
"You bet", I grin, snapping my fingers
In a rather dramatic tone
"I wonder if I can beat you at that too"
Robo exclaims, and I halt midstep
"No, you cannot", I brush it off
A thought too silly to consider
"Well, some things sure suggest otherwise
You're a chess champion, but you lose to me
I know more poetry styles than you do
Possessing a vocabulary with which you can't compete
Amn't I the one who always proofreads your work?
All the reasons why I could overshadow you easily"
I smile faintly, "Come with me"
With its puny wheels, it trails behind
I drive us both to a local cafe
My eyes browse, I find the spot
Taking a seat at the empty table
Right next to a young boy, waiting for someone
Treating myself to a pastry because I feel like it
His buttoned shirt & cologne gives it away
"Go, hear their conversation, metallic friend"
I nudge Robo, the robot- but it looks at me puzzled
"It'll begin shortly, his date will be here soon"
It nods as it goes away to follow my command
A beautiful girl comes & pulls the chair beside the guy
They order different coffees and discuss hobbies
A little chit chat and talk about college
After a while, they leave their separate ways
As I see Robo returning, I ask it what it found
"How do you think their first date went?"
"It looked fabulous, as far as I could tell
They're calm & relaxed in the other's company
Like the kind to end up in a relationship
And who knows, even happily marry"
"Except they're stupid youngsters
Who want nothing to do with that
Looking for love not knowing what it is
Hoping they'd just stumble upon the one
One thing for sure, this date wasn't it
They lack spark and chemistry together
No laughter or nervousness in their voice
Neither of them wants things to proceed
And of this fact, the other is well aware
Because what truly is young love after all
If it doesn't even make the heart flutter?
"Follow me again", I instruct, heading out the door
"The school sports competition must be almost done"
We arrive in time for the archery awards
Sophomore players standing on the winner's podium
I fold my arms as I hear their speeches
When they've each said their piece, I turn back
To face the robot who thinks it can outshine me
"Which medal do you think hurts the most?"
It ponders a minute, "A prize is a win,
So why would the awarded feel sad?
But if I must answer, it's obvious
Of the three, the bronze ranks the least"
I sigh, "I'm afraid that's not the case
The one who won silver resents it most
Because they're the one who lost a gold
The only one on the podium to lose the last round
To be a loser amongst winners, there's no fate worse
Robo argues, "But it still outranks bronze
Wouldn't that put silver in the middle
And what is the bronze so happy about
If both the other medals are above theirs?"
"Bronze is about survival, not victory
What matters more is that they made the cut
They crawled up with much difficulty
From a crowd that didn't win any"
I describe as I walk back to the car
"I'm parched, let's stop at the local store
I'll help myself to a beverage & buy you new cells"
My Robo follows me like an obedient kid
While I scan the aisle racks for some juice
The sight of a woman in rags catches my eye
As she bags a can of baby food and a few pads
I meet her eye with my lips sealed tight
Watching her run through the door
Praying she won't get caught
Robo interrupts, "Wasn't that theft?
If it was wrong, why not report it?"
Kneeling, I rest a hand on its shoulder
"I don't claim it is legal or right
But sometimes you've got to do all you can
To keep you & your family alive
The store owner can afford a few missing items
But a mother can't bear her starving child
Poverty or the system gives her no way out
So I look away as she makes her own
Some words are better unsaid
Some lawbreakers deserve better than to rot in jail"
Tears well up in my eyes as I check out
"I've got my drink, let's go"
On the drive back home, I reflect
"Humans are complex creatures, Robo
No algorithm can ever truly predict
What an aching heart feels
You'll never get it & I cannot explain
The hidden meaning behind our odd ways
Why men raise arms against
their brothers, they haven't ever met
How the ones at the top could have it all
and still feel alone
Why a girl turns down
a boy she loves madly
How a parent's blood senses
the danger their child is in
Why they tell their kid
to yell 'fire' as they run for help
How all us humans are alike
yet segregated in caste, color & gender
Why we say one thing
but mean the other
How are bellies are filled full
still our hands ask more to hold
Emotions are foreign to you
So how can you ever think to write
without having known & lived pain"
Robo is processing what I just said
With his buffering monitor, I can tell
I decide it's time for my final blow
To put the matter to rest
Once and for all
"Fancy another chess round?" I ask
"Unusual request for this time of the day
You do know the Sun is about to set?"
"I'm aware it's not noon, Robo
But does it matter if you're down to play?"
"Challenge accepted. You're on"
"Let's do this then," I remark
Just as I pull up in the driveway
I unbutton my sleeves
Rolling them up to my elbows
We set up the board for chess
Robo flips the coin & I get white
So I move my piece first
"King's Pawn- calculating further moves"
It says before resorting to French Defense
"Interesting, then I'll do this"
The game goes on as we both loosen
Robo scans all moves ever played
But before it concludes the best one,
I cunningly switch up my gameplay
To make it kill it's own time
Sacrificing my queen to shake things up
While my knight surrenders in vain
But mind you, my merciless rooks compensate
And my dutiful bishops protect
While my pawns glance the scene
Dancing their way past the bloodbath
Robo's usually good at the game
But I swear I feel it heat up
Now we're down to the endgame
All I have is a rook and a pawn
As both his bishops block my way
"Executing rook checkmate fortification defense"
But as it sees me slack, it moves to attack
I charge with a devious plan of my own
It takes a while to revert back to defense
And if fate allows, that's all I'll need
I take out a bishop as my pawn gets held hostage
I move my rook to ambush the black king
The helpless bishop shields the crown
Even if it's suicide, just to stay in the game
To Robo's surprise, I move the pawn instead
"Opponent's pawn about to promote
Calculating best possible counterattack"
Its screen displays as it captures my rook
I choose another rook to bring back to life
Closing the border my rook builds closer
In which the powerless king lays
The bishop threatens often
But I slide past its slanting lane
The box for a moment expands a bit
Alas the king is too slow to escape
My rook soon charges back
Only for the trap to constrict again
All an elaborate tactic to stall
I smile at its timer
"There is a way to draw, you know
But I refuse to play by the book
Not that it matters anyway
Considering you've got
mere seconds to spare"
It glances at a clock that's up
Robo shakes my hand as I get up.
It acts professional but is shaken within
It's not used to play games it doesn't win
"Loss on time. Black loses the game"
It announces after registering defeat
"Don't doubt my skills ever again", I joke
Pouring my soda in a glass- my victory sip
"My algorithm detects a vast change
in the way you, this once, played
Similar to your style back in your day
Like a hibernating animal suddenly awake
It's a bit of a stretch, but do tell
Has losing all these years
been a mere pretense?"
I nod, "Apparently, you've caught on
You might be my creation, after all
But it's all been for reasons too complex
that you can't even begin to comprehend"
"What do you know, metallic friend
Of overbearing expectations
that accompany a grand win
All achievements do is raise the bar
of contentment, joy, and pride
I spent nights designing you, Robo
Just so I could lose to you each day
To release some of the burden that strained
You were my ultimate escape
to forget the draining world I left behind
For the sake of my inner peace
away from the eyes & limelight
"But I'm still curious, though
Why complicate things
when you could've secured
a much easier win?"
"Consider it me nailing your coffin
Dragging your inflated ego through dust"
I mock in a teasing tone
"Except I'm a robot, with no coffin to be
I can get disassembled at most, that's all"
"Don't you tempt me", I act serious
"No way, master, you wouldn't dare!"
We both end up laughing in the end
"But there's a lesson to take here, little Robo
Analyse how many more blunders
I did than you, and yet won
Means I can write well
even if I occasionally err
Recall how I started predictable
Confusing you throughout midgame
Only to end on a timeout
All just to show you
That poetry is more about breaking free
Not some handbook rules to abide by
To make things flow is the goal
Even if a late victory is a price to pay
Just as a game demands
a player to read the board
instead of rewinding past matches
You speak your heart out with a poem
Not caring for the opinion of the masses
Something with which no intelligence can help
You don't know what people go through
And more importantly, how they feel
Your work may be grammatically correct
But who's to say if it'll breathe?
You sure can put a few words together
But can you weave them real nice
For how could your value not wither away
As soon as the magic of a human touch arrives"
"Note this down, Robo; Pay me heed
Remember well, it's not your role
Falls far beyond your scope
Help me write if that's your wish
But don't travel the road yourself
I can very well see a dead end, nothing but ruin
So do what you're good at, carrying out tasks
Render me company as I bore
And leave it to me and the poets
To mesmerise the curious readers
with our enchanting poetry & prose"
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I found this poem extremely fun to read! I loved how you consistently pointed out how data and pattern recognition cannot predict nor fully capture the human soul and why it does what it does. The relationship that Robo and their inventor have is pretty endearing and I found myself feeling bad for the little guy at the end even though I knew what was going to happen lol. I was also wondering about the inventor and their backstory because the poem mentions that Robo is the only friend they have and they tear up when they see the mother stealing food to feed her children. Why do they have no friends? Does the invention of the robot have to do with it? A critique I would give is that I had trouble picturing what they were doing on the chessboard (probably because I don't know much about chess :p) and I got a bit lost. Other than that, you did a really good job, AlexWrites! I hope to see more of your work!
Thanks redhood for reading this poem and dropping this awesome review. The details of the setting is ambiguous, upto the reader's interpretation! But I'll still share with you the backstory I intended. It's about a chess champion who gains fame for his impeccable play style early in his life. As he wins title after title, the expectations of the crowd and media only grow further and he begins to feel the sheer weight of it all. The exhaustion of being in the limelight constantly gets to him and he decides to take an early retirement, to vanish off the mainland for some peace. He moves to a secluded place where noone knows him. His former friends were fellow players who are not longer in contact with him due to his dissapearance from the scene. He spends his life making a robot, writing poetry and publishing it under an anonymous name. He makes Robo his new companion. As of the mother stealing food part, the tears were merely to highlight his emotions and empathy to mankind, in contrast to Robo who viewed the situation from a legal lens, unaffected by the woman's plight. The chess bit was a gamble, I'm aware. I wish I could have made it easier to understand but I can help clear up your specific doubts. I assure you, I'm not that good myself so the research was minimal. I just mention some openings for their characteristics. For example - King's pawn is the most common opening among grandmasters, signifying the experience and skill of the protagonist. Meanwhile Robo sticks with the French Defense- a classical defence opening for black. It's one of the oldest in the book and particularly used to counter a king's pawn. The main strategy I've used is that the protagonist plays unpredictable to waste Robo's time. By the time Robo studies his plan and searches it's database for appropriate countermoves, the protagonist has already switched his gameplay. This is to play through Robo's weakness- relying on data too much and not playing spontaneously, showing the adaptability of the protagonist to his opponent. The ending is more specific now. There's one point where if he captured the bishop with his rook, he'd easily win with this move. But instead, he chooses to make a blunder consciously and lets the chance slide by, playing his pawn instead. This, the protagonist explains later was a symbolism to the imperfection human work possesses but is still superior to AI generations (similiar to how the protagonist won despite making an obviously bad move). The very ending rook and king vs bishop and king is a very fascinating endgame you can find on the internet. Here, the one with the rook usually wins but it is possible to achieve a draw. However, it takes sufficient time to execute a draw, something the protagonist made sure Robo wouldn't have much of to defend himself against his especially tricky endgame. I'm putting in the link for that endgame, where I learnt it from. I encourage you do check it out if you're curious. We also see the protagonist not really playing by this technique in the link as he uses the rook checkmate endgame instead. It's used when one player is down to a king and a rook while the opponent only had the king. But here, we see an additional bishop with the opponent, causing problems in smooth execution. The protagonist easily dodges them and continues his work, knowing the game will be never work out till the bishop keeps interrupting for the black's defense. Because winning isn't his goal, but to stall long enough that Robo runs out of time- giving him an automatic victory. This is so because the black has what is called insufficient mating material, meaning you can't deliver a winning checkmate with a bishop alone. It could draw but now that it's time is up, it can't execute it. In some scenarios, the white still plays out but I decided to end it at the time loss to keep things simpler. Basically, here black is helpless and can do nothing except dig its own grave.
Bishop and Rook endgame: https://youtu.be/2-8g9abhAYQ?si=_8YBaXZEn9lddhwO
The Rook endgame: https://youtu.be/93JAN4nXW5I?si=gB1q64l87-r7qko-
I am extremely appreciative that you took the time to respond to me and explain what was going on, Alex! I've always been quite crummy at chess, so it was nice to be taught this new piece of information! I will definitely check the videos out and I also commend you for doing your research. Chess has always put me through the loop, so to me, for you to take the time to understand it is quite a feat! I can't wait to see what else you have in store.
Robots carry out orders and have no emotions. I love this poem. It looks like you spent a huge amount of time and effort into it. Robo is a robot, is my guess! Yes, robots and AI, humans will always be the best at writing poems and stories. Leave that to us! It is amazing, creative, and original. I believe it has lots of potential! It is really good. The syllable pattern is great, considering it was held up the entire poem. I hope you can keep writing, and HAPPY WRITING!!!
Hello, there! Thank you so much for reading this and dropping a wonderful review. Yes, I mean Robo to be a robot, though I failed to clearly mention it. Well, I won't lie it did take a lot of time and effort, but surprisingly not much more than my other shorter works. Because it doesn't follow a rhyme scheme, the flow was much easier to maintain. So despite its length, it took just two days to draft, write and edit. Shorter poems look less work but require much more refining. So glad you liked it! And yes, AI, stay in your lane.
XD No problem