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A Literary Dalliance [Part 1]

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“Reading is part of your education,” Matthew always said. “That’s why I won’t ever stop you from doing it.”

The bookshelf was most certainly Sybil’s primary destination after she wolfed down her breakfast every morning. Plate in hand, Lydia would watch disapprovingly after her daughter who was already down the hall, sniffing out pages of adventure like a dog to a bone. Her mother had long given up trying to convince Matthew towards a slightly more well-rounded curriculum. What about mathematics? Impossible, Matthew had replied as he reorganized the battered spines of some of his most favourite classics – 80,000 Leagues Under the Sea, For Whom the Bell Tolls, Down and Out in Paris and London – and lightly swept their edges with a feather duster. According to her stubborn, book-bound husband, mathematics only bred mechanical children with one-track minds, notorious for their lack of creativity. “I want Sybil to live, Lydia.”

Matthew always had the final say in things when their daughter was concerned.

Sometimes, as she looked into the mirror and prepared for bed, Lydia wished she had never allowed her husband to remove Sybil from public school in favour of homeschooling. At the time, of course, it had seemed like such a good idea. Matthew argued well and particularly well when it was about Sybil’s welfare; Lydia had not had much chance to disagree. Later, in the whispering hours of the night, he won her over with a line of kisses down her neck and sweet, sweet love between the sheets. As Lydia’s hands sweatily, ecstatically, clenched her husband closer, Matthew suggested homeschooling for a second time. He knew that his wife was weak in character, and weaker so in bed. So, between the nocturnal chirps of grasshoppers outside and the muffled, joyful sighs of Sybil’s parents indoors, the issue was settled and the young girl would begin lessons under Matthew’s supervision the very next morning.

The morning brought a table piled high with literary classics and contemporary gems, from Chaucer to David Foster Wallace’s Infinite Jest. There was not a single book dedicated to biology or algebra or history – all was fiction. Lydia had walked in, wrapped in her fluffy pink housecoat, whistling and courting a wild plan to make a delicious breakfast for her family. Upon seeing the kitchen table overflowing with nothing but pleasure volumes, her tune quickly changed. Instead, Matthew and Sybil got burnt toast and Can You Believe It’s Not Butter? butter.

Things had changed now because Lydia had come to accept to Matthew’s approach to teaching their daughter, so sometimes she made eggs. There was no other option. Still, she harboured a little darkness in her heart for the man. How was Sybil supposed to make it to college with nothing but a love for books under her belt? Gazing out the window, watching the first of the spring deer grazing the frosty grass, Lydia resigned herself to a future of living with Sybil, an old maid loyal only to her beloved novels. Over the years, Matthew gradually relinquished his hold on their daughter’s education so by the time she reached fifteen, there was now a total lack of direction. Sybil’s days entirely revolved around reading. One for Matthew to loosen his grip on Sybil was because he wanted to preserve his marriage and this what was communicated to Lydia.

The other reason he wanted to keep to himself, but it was so obvious that even the strangest of strangers to the Lesemann household would have picked up on it: Sybil was too far gone.

After breakfast, the willowy fifteen year old would scuttle down the hallway to the very end of the bungalow house where Matthew had built a reading nook for her years before. The room was about the size of an ensuite bathroom, but it functioned for Sybil’s purposes. Anything bigger would have felt too vast for the intimate pleasures of reading. The walls were floor-to-ceiling shelves of books and on the floor was a plum oriental carpet Matthew had picked up during his raging twenties’ stumble across the Middle East. The walls were painted a deep crimson to match the plush armchair that was pushed into the far corner, next to a drafty window whose replacement was long overdue. All of the books in the room belonged to Sybil and, over time, as she collected more and more, they began to exhaust the shelves’ capacity and eked out in piles onto the floor. Volumes old and new towered like literary skyscrapers around Sybil’s place in the armchair.

Today, Sybil settled into her seat with a large book she had serendipitously come across a few weeks back in a thrift shop. It was nothing like she had ever seen before, with a heavy gold cover and thick green embossing on the title and author’s name. Imbroglio by Hugh Lord, it read. The pages were thick and so far untainted by grubby fingerprints; clearly the book had not been read in years, if at all. The shop owner sold it to Sybil for a mere three dollars without a second glance.

Imbroglio was a typical fantasy-adventure novel set in a land complete with knights, damsels in distress, and drunken kings. Axel Heart was the dashing young protagonist, a knight with a lion’s courage and the wit of an eagle, but with a personality only fitting of one too aware of his good looks. Sybil ate up Hugh Lord’s every word, adventuring along with the despicably wonderful Axel Heart as he defeated dragons and wooed fetching young princesses, all in the path of his ultimate aim of overthrowing the astute and furtive Lord Hugo, a crow-like man who meddled too much with the old, naive king. And so it was that Sybil fell head over heels in love with the Axel, the knight constantly impeded by Lord Hugo’s evil plans, who won over the hearts of all.

And so it was the young girl began a beautiful, ridiculous, dreamy dalliance with a character on paper.   

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Pretzelstick
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Hello Lavvie Hepburn,

Pretzel here for a review. This was such a beautiful piece, because I think that you really described the power of reading and of books, and it resonated with me. I felt like I could relate to it, identify it in a large way possible, because of the connection with both homeschooling and getting yourself literally lost in a good book. Thank you so much for giving me the pleasure of reading this.

I feel like most of this story has been heavily focused on Sybil right now, but I think that it could definitively be valuable if you had some different side-plots appear in here a little bit more strongly.

For example: I wanted to know more about how the friction of the parent's differences made Sybil feel. Why did her mother apparently not want her to read fiction, but force her to do mathematics, and her father gave her a free reign over doing anything that she wishes? Sometimes, it's quite necessary to go a bit deeper, into the root cause of the opinion. Maybe the parents had a different educational upbringing, that forced them to look at the world through different lenses?

What about how Sybil grew as an individual after she started homeschooling in other aspects of life.(so that there's no question as to that there shouldn't be stereotypes in homeschooling, everyone learns differently and I think that you have shown this well-) Basically what the other reviewer has already mentioned, you have to ask yourself that question of what effect did this actually have on her social life, childhood, time management wise, etc.

I hope that you understand that I'm not throwing these questions out to just confuse you, but maybe make you think about expanding this first part of your writing a little bit more? I don't know if this is helpful, I just felt like it could incorporate a little bit more aspects.

During that whole paragraph with Imbroglio I feel like the writer(or reader, whichever one) intruded themselves too much into the storyline. While yes, I do know that you are the writer, it seems like the writer was giving a long praise filled summary of their work, which isn't always a bad thing, but if it's something than this paragraph probably threw me off the most. I usually skip over these types of things, so I would suggest leaving the writer instinct completely out of the equation.

So, after reading part one of this story (eagerly awaiting part 2 :)) I felt like there was a lack of dialogue, which is easy to spot because the first line is the only line of dialogue. To enhance the story, while still sticking to the character's personality, I was thinking that maybe you could maybe Sybil talk out loud to herself in her "reading room" maybe her lack of social skills lessons plus giving her an extra outlet to talk about her passion/love of books.

And so it was the young girl began a beautiful, ridiculous, dreamy dalliance with a character on paper.


I wouldn't call this a cliffhanger,(because one isn't even needed here), but this is basically a skillful wrap up to Part 1, because it has the feature of adventure, which always gets the reader excited to keep on reading.

That's all of my notes for this one.

Until Next Time,

~Your favorite Snack

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TwinCityKitty
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Wonderfully written! I'm intrigued to see where Sybil's obsession leads her. Is it weird that I'm worried about her? It doesn't sound like that girl has many friends in the real world!

I'm intrigued also to better understand where her parents' differences of opinion come from.

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na3f
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na3f wrote a review · Thu Feb 18, 2016 12:38 am

Beautifully written! I couldn't find any faults in the writing, it flowed perfectly. The characters are all very different but extremely interesting. I am intrigued by Matthew's character and motivations for keeping his daughter secluded. Perhaps something that happened in his own childhood? It seems very at odds with his charming personality (well according to his wife anyway).

One thing I'm a little confused about is the jump in story line to her when she's 15 years old, does the story really begin for her at this age or are we back in present day when she is reading "Imborglio"? It wasn't really clear to me if there was a transition there.

Hope you continue you writing this story, I'll be looking out for it!

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This is really great so far. I can't wait for more. I would really like to know more about how homeschooling affected Sybil's development though. It seems to me like that might help people to get to know the character better, and may affect the story later. I hope to read more of this story soon!



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