What if life was arrangement?
Beautiful, harmonious sounds.
Each note and rest significant to the piece.
People as notes mattering individually.
What if life was an arrangement?
Reducing you and I to notes
Then would I truly matter
To those higher than me?
What if life was an arrangement?
God could be the conductor.
Individuals pieces of a song.
Troubles rests, years, measures
Tempo changing, fingers racing
As musicians attempt to comply
With the hectic, tempo, and sound changing
Music we call life
Let's see life as an arrangement
No more suicide or murder
You'd all then play a role
I promise you, you matter
I swear to you, you do
Just bear it a little longer
Till the time is right
Until you're looked too
For your time of light
Everyone popular, mattering in life
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Hello!
I really loved this poem! I am always open to realistic ones, they are just so....realistic. XD Sorry I couldn't give you any advice... It is a really good poem! I loved the idea of it!
"God could be the conductor.
Individual pieces of a song.
Troubles rests, years, measures
Tempo changing, fingers racing"
I love this part! Even though changing and racing do not really rhyme, while I was reading it, It seemed like they did! Amazing! Keep Writing!
-SnazzyPencil
Really grate poem for a spur of a moment. Your poetry is easy reading yet emotionally powerful. I love how you compared life to an arrangement and God as a conductor. It made to think a little more about life and deeper into it's meaning.
The lines "I promise you, you matter
I swear to you, you do
Just bear it a little longer
Till the time is right" kinda made my day a little brighter, i will remember these words when i'm down or i fell like i don't matter, so thank you.
Only i didn't really get the end but maybe i just need some time to understand it.
This was grate poem, i hoe you keep writing more, good luck.
Loved the way you reflect upon life. Nothing more than a peaceful and a happy mind can write this. And yes what you said it absolutely right "Music we call life", these days music is the only way we escape form the bonds of depression. Every moment in our life reminds us a situation song, even if you fail your exams or loose a love we have a prefect song to cheer us up, even when people change music is the only thing that keeps playing us our unchanged memories in our poem. Felt really relaxed on reading your poem.
I liked the way you encouraged lost souls in your poem swearing them they too have a good life to live
"No more suicide or murder
You'd all then play a role
I promise you, you matter
I swear to you, you do
Just bear it a little longer
Till the time is right"
and for one thing to change in your poem you stated a line
"For your timr of light" it is suppose to be "time" right?
just a small one edit it.. other than that it was an wonderful poem. You have good talent. Please keep writing!
Thank you so much Brigitha! That means a lot. You're review was greatly appreciated and thank you for catching that typo.
Your welcome buddy
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