Hello, Omi! Gather 'round the circle for Review Time with Ms. Kitty!
The earthquake comes
On wild lion paws.
Ohh, like the metaphor here. It's unique, and that's what makes it so lovely!
It comes forcefully
In African plains
I suggest adding a period in order for the reader to catch his/her breath. Anyway, I love how this adds suspense, and I noticed that the line before the last adds the most.
Stalking its prey,
Until it strikes.
Ooh. I love how you put the earthquake in a lion's paws. That's a huge metaphor.
Metaphor poem over here! Awesome!
There are many problems, and it's great, I tell you!
Enjoy my like!
Keep writing.
~Kitty
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