Hey, Castiel. I'm Nonny! I love haiku's so I was surprised to see that yours was longer then most I've seen on here. It's usual a 5x7x5 and then that is it so I was surprised to see that it went on longer, but still kept the same structure other then the line that the previous reviewer mentioned. It does seem like there are multiple haiku's inside one big one and that's fascinating. In all, I can't really say anything bad about this poem. I think that it was well thought out and written excellently. I think that my favorite part was where you mentioned the temples, grasping for the stars. The entire poem flowed nicely. I'm sorry for such a short review but I really can't see anything wrong with this.
Keep writing!
-Nonny
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