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Vyper's Villanelles



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Fri Mar 29, 2013 2:55 am
Shady says...



I'm in.

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"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Mon Apr 01, 2013 9:11 am
Karzkin says...



I would love to see you write thirty villanelles.
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

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Mon Apr 01, 2013 10:27 am
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It's not so hard. Me and a couple of others wrote an impromptu one in chat in 10 mins.
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Spoiler! :
To be perfectly honest, I'd never seen a villanelle before. I just liked the looks of the word. However, I wrote one. We'll see if I manage 30-- probably not.


Gollum's Villanelle

Just beyond our grasp, the ideas dance free;
Hard to capture, they're a rabid mutt.
We hates the tricksy poetry.

We knows that poetry's not so hard, when the lines fly free,
But lacking insipriation, we refuse to stray from our rut.
Just beyond our grasp, the ideas dance free.

We look at our poems, and failure is all we see,
So we edit and we cut
And we hates the tricksy poetry

We try to focus and find the key
That will let us understand. But
Just beyond our grasp, the ideas dance free.

Poetic licenses gives us room to toy and see
How far we can push before the tolerance is shut.
And we hates the tricksy poetry.

Sometimes our thoughts behave, and let us see
Clearly. But, normally, like a blow to the gut,
Just beyond our grasp, the ideas dance free.
And we hates the tricksy poetry.

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Tue Apr 02, 2013 3:21 am
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A poem about how rhyming and structure can sometimes stifle genuine creativity. I AM ALL ABOUT IT.
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II

Like an ominous mountain,
The dishes are stacked;
The sinks are overfilled,
And there's none on the rack.

The backroom is piled high,
And don't smell quite right.
Something might've died,
Amongst the clothes in the back.

The windows are smeared,
With a strange type of grease
That's hard to get off,
And gives me no peace.

It makes me real mad,
When I step on a rock
Lying on the floor of my pad,
Surrounded by dirt, grim, and gunk.

There's little that I hate
More than a dirty house.
So I toss a bucket of water,
And hope that everything is safe to douse.

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Tue Apr 02, 2013 11:03 pm
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Karzkin says...



Non-villanelles make me sad.
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

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Tue Apr 02, 2013 11:07 pm
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Yeah, haha, I tried to write a villanelle for that one, but I couldn't make it fit. Maybe I'll get more inspiration tomorrow. :)

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Tue Apr 02, 2013 11:15 pm
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Good luck ^.^
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

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Tue Apr 02, 2013 11:23 pm
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Thanks! :)

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Sat Apr 06, 2013 2:30 am
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Over it already~

Peer pressure is
A nasty thing.
It's trapped me in choir,
And forced me to sing.

I've been in plays,
And on teams for sports, trees, and dance.
Got dressed up in tutus,
And then had to prance.

I've gone to camps
I never would pick.
Have fallen the wiles,
Of my friends and their tricks.

But by far the
Biggest woe
My friends ever caused,
Was convincing me to write in this year's NaPo.

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Sun Apr 07, 2013 1:28 am
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IV

I cry in the morning,
I cry all the night.
I cry because
No one's there to hold me tight.

I lay down in the morning,
I lay down in the night.
I lay more than I should
'Cause my stomach don't feel right.

I lie in the morning,
I lie in the night.
I lied in this poem,
Hope I don't cause no fight.

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Thu Apr 11, 2013 8:31 pm
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Wonderland

Far away, there is a place.

So unpredictable. It's hard to guess, whether
You'll soar, or be dumped on your face.
You never know,
'Til you spread your wings

And take the chance.

Watch the politics,
Learn the dance.
Make a name,
Then find yourself

A back to stab.

Write a speech, or just blab,
Inspire an army,
And march against the Queen;
Betray her sister,

And steal the throne.

Not born of The Family, a new ruler has come.
A man sitting all alone.
A wife is needed, a wife is found.
Worse than the king, she rules

With an iron fist.

She sees the strings, and pulls them all.
Nursing grudges, she makes a list;
Revenge to be gotten,
Paid through the blood of one so young.

A lie is planted, a plan infalliable.

Within the mind of a girl
That has a temper so volatile;
A young love crushed,
As a silent heart breaks.

Sadness rules,

And tyranny.
The only hope, a family of fools,
Too proud to unite.
And then,

When all hope is lost,

The Hearts will mend,
And the Whites will weigh the costs;
Two sisters once more,
Reunited...for once. For now.

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Thu Apr 11, 2013 8:41 pm
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VI

Standing before a sink
Filled with bubbles, water, and dishes,
I lift a glass
And sigh.

A voice behind me,
I start;
I'm home alone.

I grab a knife
And turn around.
Slowly I lower my blade;
There's no one there.

"Down here."
The voice again.
"Look on the ground."

I look down, and what
Do I see, but a dozen little men
Each dressed well, with a cane and a watch,
And a tiny top hat.

"A chore for you,
A pleasure for us.
Just sit back and watch."

I step back and marvel
As the little men spring
Into action.

They shined the dishes,
And swept the floor.
Arranged the cabinets,
And washed the doors.

"We'll clean to a merry tune,
I can whistle and you can sing.
When our work is through,
The credit is yours."
~~
Standing before a sink
Filled with bubbles, water, and dishes.
I lift another glass,
And sing a merry tune.

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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