I like your poems. Especially "babysitting". It has a really good rhythm and descriptions. You're very good at rhyming too. Your rhymes don't feel obvious if you know what I'm saying. Sometimes rhyming comes off as too forced and your poems aren't like that at all.
Hiya looseleaf!! First of all can I just say your intro image for this thread is so neat?? Also love the idea of an act of kindness being a piece of love left behind, that's so wholesome and poetic <33
babysitting definitely summarizes the chaos of young children perfectly xD I think the rhyming scheme fits the mood of that one really well, it's funny and light-hearted and altogether really nice! c: "oh and now the dogs pink" the offhandedness of that statement is beautiful.
Also adore the fact that the title of the haiku is two syllables longer than the actual haiku, that's such a mood and I love it <33
Ooh I really like your latest poem, I think you do an awesome job establishing the mood of mystery/stillness/intrigue!! "watching new victims", "waiting for them to join", "but the halls full of people / were silent" -> these images all have a delightful morbidness to them c:
Keep up the great work!! <3
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.
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