Right, so I've unfortunately lost the original version of this (argh) so I've been trying to re-write it, and it hasn't been as successful as I would have liked. So, here is my attempt at a re-write:
A cool breeze swept across Dùbhlan's sketches of the towering forest in which she sat, awakening her from thought. She looked up through the thick, black branches, noting that the sun was turning red; it was time to go home. Another breeze swept through Dùbhlan's dark, unkempt hair, taking with it her sketches, and scattering them throughout the trees. Mumbling crossly to herself, she tromped through the wet, fallen leaves of the Scottish autumn, trying to find every last sketch. But as she tread, the wind picked up its speed, whistling through the branches, and making her chase further and further into the forest, until she reached a sudden drop. Stopping just in time, she watched her beautiful sketches fall into the lonely pool below the drop.
She sat down gloomily at the foot of the steep hill, staring blankly ahead, until she realized her surroundings were quite different than she could remember. I must've gotten myself turned around, she thought in frustration, how typical. She had never gone this far into the forest she called Cridhe-an-Alban. As her eyes searched for a familiar path, Dùbhlan became aware of a little yellow flower sitting beside her. Its muted green stem was thick, and though capable of holding many buds, gave way to but one gleaming yellow flower--alone, like Dùbhlan so often felt. The flower struck an odd curiosity in her, so she picked it, fearing she would not find another like it, and tucked it safely behind her ear.
Her spirit somewhat lifted at her discovery of the flower, Dùbhlan stood, deciding she might as well try to find a path that would take her home. She began to turn, but she saw something move out of the corner of her eye. Turning to face the pool, she looked closer, and saw that an aged old man move below the drop, seemingly without noticing her. She bent for a closer look. This was no human at all! A fairy, perhaphs? He had a long face, with a cheerless expression, though he mumbled an unfamiliar song as he picked berries from a bush. As he moved about, Dùbhlan noticed his legs were covered in thick brown fur, with hooves in place of feet. Curiosity getting the better of her, she began to climb down the steep hill, the flower behind her ear falling to the ground. When she reached the ground, the fairy was no where in sight. Dùbhlan picked up the flower, studying it; there he was again! She turned around, dropping the flower in awe, but he was gone!
"Wait!" she called out. She picked up the flower, and began to walk the opposite direction, but again! there he was. Now wary of the flower, she dropped the it while facing his direction, the fairy still unaware of her presence. As the petals dropped from her grasp, he disappeared. Facing the same direction, she picked up the flower, and, as she expected, he appeared. It was the flower! It must be a key into the Fairy World, she decided.
She tread silently closer, and the fairy caught sight of her, but stood his ground. But as Dùbhlan approached, he began to back away.
"No--" she whispered, not wanting to lose sight of him again.
"So you can see me," the fairy confirmed, his gentle voice strange to Dùbhlan's ears. His large eyes glistened, reflecting the noiseless pool.
"Yes," breathed Dùbhlan, slightly taken aback as she glanced at the flower in her hand.
"And you do not run?" asked the fairy, obviously as bewildered as Dùbhlan.
"Is there reason to?" asked Dùbhlan, now frightened.
"No--no, but all others do. My appearance perhaphs? I do not frighten you then?"
"Frighten me?" she asked, hoping the fairy would not sense her slight trepidation. "No. No, no, of course not. You've met others--like me then?"
"'Course I have. But none that stayed," said the fairy with a melancholy chuckle.
"Is it--is it this," said Dùbhlan, gesturing toward the flower in her hand, "that makes you visible?"
"Me, everything. Yes. That is the Culver's Key, and I thought I had gotten rid of the last of them."
"The last of them? Why?" asked Dùbhlan, unable to imagine why he would dispose of such a wonderful gift.
"Because I'm tired of men--trompin' into a world that isn't their's--and befoulin' it. They don' like folk like us," he said bitterly, digging his hooves into the leaves.
"I should go then," said Dùbhlan quickly, hoping she had not angered him.
"No--not you. You're not afraid, are you?" the fairy replied, a look of marvel lighting his face. "It's good you've found that. I'm glad."
"Y-you are?" Dùbhlan asked, rather surprised. "Me too. You know this forest well then?"
"Very well."
"I've gotten meself turned around. I'm supposed to be home by now. W--will you show me a way out?"
"That I will."
The strange fairy led Dùbhlan out as she had come, but as the trees thinned, and the forest was coming to an end, Dùbhlan regretted having to leave.
"I don't like to go out there, ya' don't mind, do you?" the fairy asked, his eyes lamenting the dwindling trees.
"No," replied Dùbhlan solemnly.
"Will you come back again?" he asked hopefully.
"As soon as I can," she promised, turning loathingly to the cold road home.
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