Haiku Train

BarrettBenedict · 2009-04-26T07:14:14Z

This is pretty simple and can be lots of fun. The premise is you take the last line of the haiku before yours and make it the first as yours. It doesn't necessarily have to be the exact line either. If you can cleverly change it in subtle ways so that it rhymes or sounds the same that is also cool. Example: This is a haiku five, seven, five syllables would be the format ... could be a doormat were it not for the large head must be tiger's skin etc. So here's a starter haiku: old film reels rotate monochrome images of what dogs imagine

Fern

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Wed Mar 12, 2025 7:15 am

Fern says... · Wed Mar 12, 2025 7:15 am

dust in a locked jaw
please say something anything
don't abandon me

social life is like an ipad

and i don't have an ipad

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herb

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Wed Mar 12, 2025 6:13 pm

herb says... · Wed Mar 12, 2025 6:13 pm

don't abandon me;
i too-- no, we all die with
memories of day.

[soon, i will submit myself to the stars]

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Silvern

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Sat Mar 15, 2025 12:27 am

Silvern says... · Sat Mar 15, 2025 12:27 am

memories of day
unravel at twilight's breath
into hollowness.

Democracy dies in darkness. Also at 4:30PM in Pacific Standard Time, apparently.

silver (she/her)

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syzygy

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Mon Mar 17, 2025 7:40 pm

syzygy says... · Mon Mar 17, 2025 7:40 pm

into hollowness
i soar, wings spread wide open
i do not quite fit

"sounds gay, i'm in!"

he/they

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Dottie

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Mon Mar 17, 2025 8:30 pm

Dottie says... · Mon Mar 17, 2025 8:30 pm

I do not quite fit
In between the pavement's cracks
Yet I bring beauty

.-ie

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avimoon

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Mon Mar 17, 2025 9:53 pm

avimoon says... · Mon Mar 17, 2025 9:53 pm

There is a lot held
inside my heavy chest. It
is my heart and breath.

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LuminescentAnt

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Mon Mar 17, 2025 10:24 pm

LuminescentAnt says... · Mon Mar 17, 2025 10:24 pm

Is my heart and breath
so trembling and partial,
I dim like small stars?

Good is not a thing you are. It's a thing you do.

- Ms. Marvel

LuminescentAnt ~ Lum ~ Ant
(she/her)

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Fern

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Mon Mar 17, 2025 11:44 pm

Fern says... · Mon Mar 17, 2025 11:44 pm

i dim like small stars
fading, insignificant
looking and longing

social life is like an ipad

and i don't have an ipad

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avimoon

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Mon Mar 17, 2025 11:54 pm

avimoon says... · Mon Mar 17, 2025 11:54 pm

looking and longing,
the parchment slips. i fall out
of time, i run out.

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Fern

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Tue Mar 18, 2025 12:03 am

Fern says... · Tue Mar 18, 2025 12:03 am

of time, i run out
emptiness awaits me and
i will welcome it

social life is like an ipad

and i don't have an ipad

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Wolfi

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Tue Mar 18, 2025 12:49 am

Wolfi says... · Tue Mar 18, 2025 12:49 am

i will welcome it
and bring its incandescence
to another home

John 14:27
Peace I leave with you; my peace I give you.
I do not give to you as the world gives.
Do not let your hearts be troubled
and do not be afraid.

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Fern

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Tue Mar 18, 2025 4:23 am

Fern says... · Tue Mar 18, 2025 4:23 am

to another home
arriving only to be
left alone once more

social life is like an ipad

and i don't have an ipad

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