what lovely little treasures! i love your experimentation with longer lines and parenthetical additions and different spacing ... it all feels fresh and new even as the best part—your sheer wordsmith-iness—has remained.
so far, my favorites are 1 ('brush time through your hair' is gorgeous), 3 ('pout smoke' - love the imagery!), 5 (feeeels), 10 ('i am a fresh chapter' and the whole poem is so relatable), 12 (the end gave me smol chills of the best sort), and 13 (which just made me grin—what a wonderful gem of hopefulness)
many muchnesses of thank for this break-treat, and i can't wait to read the rest <3
an intellectual is someone whose mind watches itself ~ albert camus
@Sonder I really enjoyed reading so many of these! I love the unique imagery and the emotional tension in them. I definitely struggle to do anything with formatting that isn't just a simple line break or a single indent effectively - but I think you've executed your formatting very well in these pieces.
I like how 10 feels like a thought within a thought behind a thought. And I also really enjoyed 2 especially the unique imagery in the first three lines.
"I do not like compromises / being handed a needle and / splitting the seams between my teeth"
you should know i am a time traveler & there is no season as achingly temporary as now
That's just what translation is, I think. That's all speaking is. Listening to the other and trying to see past your own biases to glimpse what they're trying to say. Showing yourself to the world, and hoping someone else understands. — Ramy (Babel by R. F. Kuang)
