finding (and creating) avant-garde poems

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12- Elegy of Sorrow
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Woah, fellow one!
Woah, all who hear!
God has fallen!
We are all damned!

(1)
We groan grievously
Becoming impure
Everyone abhors
Our nakedness.

(2)
Our enemies
Taunting us
Hissing, gnashing
They cry and mock
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13 - wraith
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Where the humans dwell
Reeking with mortality
A special human lives
Isolating from their husk
Their souls ascend
Happy of seeing their love
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14 - space
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floating
in existence
fly with me
my love
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15 - (untitled)
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smoke rises from the ground
a pillar of gray fog emerges
the snow is now screaming
and bombs are ringing
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i
have
nothing
to
say.
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17 - listen

untamed tongues
words with blades
touch the sharp
and one can bleed
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18 - tan.gent

sine
cosine
tangent
triangle

cosecant
secant
cotangent
inversed
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19 - headphones
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Listen to the music
Feel its divinity
Blast the noises
Heaphones!
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20 - Encrypted Tome
am i a machine
someone help me please

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One, two, three,
Numbers and letters?
Four, five, six,
Morse and Caesar?

Seven, eight, nine,
Yaya!
Ten, the best number
Let's go!

We are ready to break and destroy
Your ground, your mind, and your soul.
Our beats and disortions blast,
This is Delta Diyu, everyone!

WE ARE ENCRYPTED TOME!
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21 - anomaly

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Whales with angelic wings
Books with painful stings
Clouds that cry sweet honey
Rats that jump like bunnies
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22 - rabbit

Hop
Jump
Leap
Dance
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I like these short poems of yours, Kelisot! The ones where you incorporate Math are really interesting: the line breaks and shape kind of reflect what the words are saying, particularly the one on "inverse".

'Encrypted Tome' has this sense of chaos to it. The voice is very energetic there, which grabbed my attention. Also:

am i a machine
someone help me please

*sends help*

I really like 'anomaly'. Each of the images is eye-catching and playful, especially "Rats that jump like bunnies". Somehow with the animal motif, "Books with painful stings" makes me imagine a book that's a honeybee (or a honeybee that's also a book?).

Good luck with NaPo!
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23 - #00008b_tonic

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You're burning hot yeah,
I see ya eyes now!
Wanna party all night,
So raise that drink high-

high- high- high-
high- high- high-
high- high- high-

hi-hi-hi-hi
h-i-i-i-i-i

one dark blue tonic
poppy drugs
Last edited by Kelisot on Wed May 18, 2022 4:14 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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24 - penguin

Wobble
Waddle
Dive
Splash!
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25 - fairydust

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Sparkling glitters fall
With a big poof
And some imagination
Fantasy is fairydust!
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