Christianity ( In a Nut Shell)

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E (Everyone)- because EVERYONE needs to hear this.
It's about religion- specifically about Christianity.
If you don't like/feel offended by/won't appreciate this sort of thing- DON'T READ IT.

But it's very light-hearted( which is rare- for me.)

Ever heard the phrase- We love your God, not your Christians?
yeah well here it is.

Please tell me what you think( but don't debate about it- that's rude.)lol
You'll notice I tried to argue both sides( within the religion- had nothing to do with atheism) sorry.

ENJOY!!!!


We've all assumed and made fun of the things that we just don't 'get'.
But there's a difference between 'knowing' something and living it.

Life's a mountain and true faith means working to the top.
But even striving's got to have its limit- and now's the time to stop.
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So now we've confused striving with strife ,and it's just getting worse.
Because the truth is that nowhere's safe when there's hatred in the church.

Arguing over the fact and fiction that we just don't understand.
Failing to realize that love and punishment really go hand in hand.
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Others look at us, and are hearing us sing our life-song.
Some may be loving the tune ,but we've just got the pitch wrong.

We are representing more than just body and a buildin'.
It's all about the god of Moses and the Holy spirit that filled him.
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Heaven and Hell are real - but that's not the full story.
We need to be representing Christ and bringing him the glory.

You see- every religion has got to have its Westboro(s) and Lakewood(s).
But just because I'm feeling it doesn't mean that the action is good.
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Nobody is perfect- but that's really no excuse.
And sinning in salvation repetitively is just abuse.

We're trying to build a temple without reading the directions,
and using pretty words and phrases to cover its imperfections.
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Just doing good works and playing yourself will get you nowhere.
You'll make it to that point in your life- and then you'll just stay there.

Pursuing only heaven as your main goal is no real accomplishment.
'Making it' is fine- but how did you change the world while you were in it?
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All I'm saying is that life is too short to be a lie.
You may think pursuing truth is "boring" but you won't know if you won't try.

Love your neighbor- then proclaim that you truly love your God.
Jesus is my driver and I'm in the backseat of a hot rod.
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That's life.
So find the balance.

Of understanding and aversion.
Of love and disdain.
Of self control and assertion.
Of resting in the sunset and singin' in the rain.

Of discipline and forgiveness.
Of joy and long-suffering.
Of stern knowledge and innocence.
Of knowing when to turn the dial of life from fast-paced to buffering.
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That's probably the hardest thing about Christianity.
We've had the answer for a while, but refuse to pursue it.
And when we do- we get the balance all wrong.

Christianity isn't Burger King.
And we can't 'have it our way'

We're either too hot or too old.
Too New-aged or too old( fashioned).
Too judgmental or too understanding.

The only difference is the title.

And in the end- The God that saved us takes all the blame.


Dear God, I'm Sorry.


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I don't expect this to get much (if any at all) positive feedback, because I know it's a bit... how you do say...?
-CONTROVERSIAL.
But I hope you get something out of this, and are blessed by this poem.
Thank you for your time!
-Jojo
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I love it. It feeds my soul and rings true to what I beleive in. I love it... I wonder what gave you the idea to write this...




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Hey, it's brave of you to do something controversial. In general it was quite nice but i felt that the lines where to long, and because of that the rhyming almost useless, I also didn't really get the rhythm either but take what i say with a grain of salt as i am no expert.

As a generally open minded, non- religious person ( and that does not mean I'm atheist, i believe in a god but i don't like the system and the idea of religious fundamentalism, basically the people not the religion) i found most of your point's valid. Your voice really got though, which is great.
I also liked the set up of this poem, the shape was very good, I'm a freak and I'm really fussy about the shape of a poem. I don't understand how you argued for the other side but you seemed to have really looked though the problems of religion but in the end you justified or glazed over the problems.

Some of your lines where just amazing. But i don't understand how you still believe in Hell, it's so feudal and frankly taken directly from paganism, an oppressive scare campaign. A god who is kind does not roast people on fires and let eagles eat their entrails not even under the guise of 'love' and 'good'. Anyway...

great poem, keep up the good work!
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Well, there is a judgment side to God that people really don't like to acknowledge
 (even some of his own followers don't believe that Hell exists- but it does)
And that's where my whole "love and punishment" stanza comes in.

And that's probably the reason why hard-core believers aren't too popular.
They acknowledge that God isn't a push - over, he does punish people for sinning, and Hell is waiting for those who refuse to repent.

That's our belief, anyway.

Nowadays, people are trying to either water down the basics of Christianity- or become loveless fundamentalists. Both of which are a terrible and complete misrepresentations of the God we serve.

God loves us, and he punishes us, too.
Can't have one without the other and really succeed in life.

Doesn't stop people from trying, though.


I hope that answers your question.
Thanks for the reviews.

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All all honesty, when I read this, I didn't take it as a poem. Because the form is pretty much just spacing your sentences out in a way that doesn't make it an essay or report. Hence why I'm not going to critique it in that manner.

But I will say that I'm a little surprised.

I'm not going to start an argument or debate anything on a review because that wouldn't be positive in the least. Your inspiration comes from your belief and I respect that whole-heartedly. What I will say though is that I don't really find this controversial. Its what the church expects of you, almost. Its been hammered down into anyone and everyone who has attempted to put themselves into something of that general sort. Its the 'stamp' that one should recieve the moment they decide to believe.

Maybe thats why I don't believe. Because I don't need a 'stamp' to be a good person, nor do I put blame on anyone but myself, especially when, in my case, I would be blaming something that doesn't exist.

I respect your opinion. I think this poem shows you're a good ol' christian girl, and thats cool. You have faith which is something a lot of people can't seem to find in their lives. I personally would never choose to find that path for the sheer skepticism in me, but if you find something in it, its really yours to feel and I'm glad you took the time to put those emotions out there even if the feedback, like my own, wasn't really 'for' the topic.

Other than that, I respect you, but I would move this from poetry. To me it doesn't seem at all like it would fit under those pretenses. Sorry if thats harsh!

If you wish to continue talking about this or to 'strike up a debate' as some would see fit, just message me. I'm the type to put my opinions across, but not where it doesn't seem fit. On a review which is supposed to show form and grammatical strength, I shouldn't go into a religious debate so I wont.

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Thanks for the reviews.
No- I'll pass on the debate. I've made up my mind (religiously speaking), so there really is nothing to debate.
But thank you for being considerate and focused.

I really respect that in a person.
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Hey Jojo! :D

You see- every religion has got to have its Westboro(s) and Lakewood(s).
But just because I'm feeling it doesn't mean that the action is good.

I'm not quite sure what you mean here... the other verses made sense! It's just this one which seems a little off.

This poem also seems to be three different poems... I would probably split them up into three separate poems! I do like the Burger King analogy though.

The first poem seems like it would be an awesome rap. So, if you have any friends who like rap, maybe you could get them to record this for you. It may be fun. :)

As far as putting love and punishment together? That kind of hints of S&M, so I might try rewording it a bit... it's a little awkward as it is! Unless, of course, you wanted that sort of imagery to come out.

Hope that helps!
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The first poem seems like it would be an awesome rap. So, if you have any friends who like rap, maybe you could get them to record this for you. It may be fun


That's what it was at first. And I was about to email it to one of my favorite Christian rappers.
But I was too lazy.

Thanks for the review!
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Well, hmmmmmmm... I liked the way you wrote it, it sounded very artistic, so I'll give you props for that, but like you said, it was controversial. I didn't really like the topic in general. I don't know, I just didn't think the style of writing (the beautiful poetry) fits with the controversial, almost political views. Nice job with the writing, and I realize it's your style, but they might turn out a lot better if you write about something more care free, it would be beautiful.

Sorry if I was critical, but it's just the way I roll. ;)




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Thanks for the reviews, but I'll write about what I feel compelled to.
Life in general isn't care-free. So I wrote about what is near to my heart.
Thank you!
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I have a friend who will rap it for you, maybe. Want me to ask him if he'll do it?
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I have a friend who will rap it for you, maybe. Want me to ask him if he'll do it?

Thanks, but no thanks.
I'm on a spiritual quest right now. And I have other things in need to focus on.
But I really appreciate the offer.
Hope he succeeds( and junk).

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Dear Jojo,

I'm finally here.

I go to the technical sides first. Should I? Yes, I should.

But even striving's got to have its limit<space- and now's the time to stop.


So now we've confused striving with strife, <space>and it's just getting worse.


Some may be loving the tune ,but we've just got the pitch wrong.


We are representing more than just body and a buildin'.


For me, it's OK to put up the whole word: building.

It's all about the God of Moses and the Holy spirit that filled him.


You see<space>- every religion has got to have its Westboro(s) and Lakewood(s).


Nobody is perfect- but that's really no excuse.
And sinning in salvation repetitively is just abuse.


Love this stanza.

You'll make it to that point in your life<space>- and then you'll just stay there.


'Making it' is fine<space>- but how did you change the world while you were in it?


Love your neighbor<space>- then proclaim that you truly love your God.


And in the end- The God that saved us takes all the blame.


I want to cry.

NITPICKS

I go all spinning with the format, dear. You use quotation quotes and apostrophes interchangeably for emphasizing something. Choose one! xD And the bold and italics also made my head spin. Then we had small fonts underneath, which, surprisingly (?), seems part of the poem. (LOL) If it wasn't, well, you're a natural poet.

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If I were alone right now - obviously, I'm not (LOL) - I would have cried. I mean, the Enemy is penetrating the church.
My... It's just sad. I can't speak about it right. Every time I think about it, it just brings me down. It's just too sad. Let's pray for our the body of Christ. Sometimes, oh wait, MOST of the time, Christians are moving as if they would rather please people than to glorify God.

Thanks for sharing this, Jojo. God bless!

Forever in Christ,
Jash ♥
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not only because I see it, but because by it I see everything else.”


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That is so true especially with christianity nowadays. A double Amen for ringing the bell of truth! Beautiful poem I enjoyed reading it and it has ministered to me as well. Thank you for posting this :)




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One word - Amen.


I loved this poem and it has feeling. You really like creating works on controversial topics...

My only real critiques are that, since you are speaking about God, you should capitalize all of the "he's" and "him's".
Also, be careful when using such long sentences in a poem, they may disrupt the flow or overdo it.

Well, that's about it, great work!

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