I mean this in the least harshest way possible but I found this to look more like some manifesto instead of a poem, to me it did not reflect the beauty one would normally find in a poem. It's not so much the subject matter as such it's the fact that to me it just seems like you are trying to spew your ideas out in a sort of structure that seems a bit like some sort of cliff notes to the Bible. I just didn't think it was a poem. I think it would be more appropriate to the subject matter if you presented it in more of a suitable format than as a poem. Thankyou for taking the time out to read my review. I'm sorry it was so critical xx
wow...just wow. I was raised in the church of God all my life, and this piece really stunned me, it's what a lot of people are thinking, what I've been thinking for a long while now, but can't convey it without getting too angry and loosing my point or being too afraid to upset people by telling the truth. Really great piece, with your permission I'd like to reccomend it to a few of my friends, I feel like they could really benifit from reading it. Also, LOVE your signature, pray until something happens, that's amazing and it made me smile
THE FUTURE IS BULLETPROOF, THE AFTERMATH IS SECONDARY <3
