The Cruelty Challenge (Accepting)

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So, I hear VuzzyCat can't write yet, but I'm going to continue without so I can keep this sb from dying. Thanks

Blade
"Welcome, welcome, and make yourselves comfortable." I say, then chuckle. All the girls look somewhat scared, and the boys look rebellious, but also scared.
"This is my orientation. So, I would advise keeping quiet while I speak." I say. Then I wrinkle my nose, and take out my handkerchief, holding it over my nose. "What a horrible smell! I say we give you all a nice cleaning before we begin, no?" I say, pushing a button on my watch.
"At your service, sir." says Kalef. He has five men behind him. Kalef grabs the girl named Mary, and pulls her to her feet. Finding her cuffs off, he growls. Then, grabs both of her wrists, and holds them behind her back in an iron grip. She winces, but doesn't resist. Each of the other men grab a kid, and they march out of the door. The ones with the girls head towards one 'house' and the boys head to the one beside it. It's a big room, with bars all on the windows and doors, with three tubs in each room. there are towels, soaps, everything. There are ladies waiting to help the girls, and men waiting for the boys.
The guards pull the gates closed behind the girls and boys, and lock it with electronic locks. Unlockable only by me. I see the scared faces of the youth, peering out at me.
"Have a good time!" I say, walking away.

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Rebecca (Maid servant)
I receive the girls into my room, and beckon them to sit on the chairs awaiting them. They do. I look at the shelves containing the scented soaps, brushes, combs, shampoo, conditioner, and everything ever needed for a spa. The tubs await with hot water, and bubble bath soap in them.
"Okay, girls, you can undress and get in the baths." I say. I take out three rough soaps, and pass one to each of my two helpers. They each choose a girl, and help them into the hot water. I go to the middle girl.
"What's your name?" I ask.
"Mary." she responds. I help her into the tub, and she sighs. I set one of her arms on a cushion, and start scrubbing away. It will hurt a bit, but I have to get them clean. I go though the process of scrubbing away on her whole body. Her skin is still dirty, and red from the scrub. I line up the soaps I'll use.
There's shampoo, conditioner, and hair stuff at the end. Body cream, soap, and scrubbing is first.... So many things! I have at least ten things lined up. I accidentally push the body jet button, but quickly turn it off.
"If you want to turn it on, tell me." I say.

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Okay. So, I'm thinking you guys can write anything about the baths... Feel free to make up names for the 'maids' or cleaning helpers.
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Daniel - Bath house

I'm upset I didn't get more time with the girl, but at least I learned her name. Auburn. Her name is as beautiful as she is.

A man orders us out of our clothes and into the tubs. I'm starting to realize that my clothes are just rags, when compared to Blade, the guards, and the people in the bath house. I drop my torn, dirty shirt and pants on the ground and slide into the warm water. A tired-looking man comes over and introduces himself as Ben. He starts scrubbing my arm rigorously. "Owch," I say.

Ben winces and tries to scrub a little softer. "Sorry," he says, "But it has to be done. You've got to get clean."

"Why?" I'm puzzled. "I've never had to be clean before."

Ben shakes his head and keeps scrubbing. "You're going into the real world now, kid. You're not going to sit in a cell all day. You're going to be around people. People, especially girls, don't like it when you're caked in dirt and smell like a barn."

"Oh," I say. "If it'll make Auburn like me, I'll grin and bear it."

Ben laughs, moving to the end of the tub to clean my feet. "You've been out for what now, an hour? And you're already trying to impress the ladies. Attaboy"

"Yeah," I sigh, "I saw her walking by my cell one day. She's so beautiful."

"Well," says Ben, "If you want advice on women, I'm your guy." All the while he cleans the rest of my body, I listen to his advice on how to get ladies to like you. Of course, I don't know how accurate his advice is...
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Spencer Mitchell- Bath House


We are dragged into the bath house and take off our rags we've been wearing as clothes. Then we are all seperated to go with a different person, I am sent off with a man named Roger, who seems to have had his spirit broken long ago; he walks with his head down, and makes eye contact with no one, also him and his voice are very shaky, and he jumps at the slightest noise. He starts scrubbing me roughly, but I don't dare show weakness, I just sit there and wince. Once he's done cleaning me from head to toe, it's been quite a while, I sit with the other boys and wait for the guards to come collect us. For once we are clean, my hair is soft, my skin is smooth, my clothes are not tattered, they are new. We are all dressed in long pants and short sleeve shirts, each of our own is a different color. I wear black pants and a green shirt, we all have white socks and black tennis shoes, the only reason I know all of this is because Roger explained it to me as he gave it to me. Then the guards come in, a guard for each of us. We are recuffed, and roughly pulled back to the room with the nice furniture where we were previously. Then we are roughly thrown onto the couches and the girls enter, they are thrown down as well. Then Blade re-enters. I really hate that guy, bu he can't know that yet, not until I am sure I can escape.

When we were first brought in here, I was brought to him and forced to kneel, he stared me down and laughed evilly. "Well if it isn't our ideal prisoner. You were so easily broken all that time ago.' he laughed, "That just makes it more fun to torture you, to see how far your obediance will go." Then he kneed me in the gut, and I was sent here. It still hurts because I'm so wweak, he has to think I am still his loyal slave, prisoner, whatever; but that's just until I can escape. Now he is about to start speaking to us.
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Auburn Snow

I instantly don't like Blade, I know he's pretty easy to hate but I feel like I'm drawn to him, willing to hate him as he finishes his morale boosting speech.

After a few seconds of silence a grop of men grab us and start walking us to the 'bath house' my chauffeur is stooped and grumbling wearing a thin knitted hat as we walk out the door. I look at the other kids as they walk past me, Mary rebellious,Spencer quite but confident. I stare past them and catch the look of Daniel, his handsome and warm eyes following me as I walk past him. I stumble surprised by the rush of emotions that collide into me anger that he had looked at me like that and something else...after the short glance. His eyes where calm and collected, looking like he was searching for something. I tried to look ahead as the man pushes me into the large room laden with towels and soaps.
 The man orders me out of my clothes that hung limply from my body and pushes me to one of of the baths. The wariness of the bath is invigorating but even more is the surprisingly stiff but warm hand off what I learned to be Tim as he slowly cleaned me from head to toe.

" You have to be clean, for Blade and the outside people" He says startling me out of my frozen position.
I sat in silence after that, he dressed me in a three quarter white cotton shirt ( or he tells me anyway) and a pair of comfortable pants which I instantly liked. He leaves my hair out and gives me a reassuring pat on the shoulder. I look across the rows of towels and soaps to see the other girls being leaded out of the room. Tim grabs my shoulder and leads me out of the room.
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Mary Castro

The bath was nice, but I had a feeling that they were just dolling me up to get ruined again.
When everyone was back into the room I sat on the couch stroking the tight black jeans that clung to me. I also has a white plain shirt on and leather boots.
I watched the other prisoners filling in around me. I concealed the nail under my hand, occasionally checking it to make sure it was sharp. The guard that dragged me out of my cell was less then a foot away from me.
I looked at everyone around me, and I figured no one else was going to do anything.
On a whim I jammed the nail in to the side of the guards knee. He doubled over in pain and I slammed him over. Blade had slapped my face in a second, but I just pulled myself back up long enough to kick him in the crotch and punch him in the face.
The guard I stabbed threw me back onto the couch, muttering profanity under his breath.
"If it weren't for the fact that I need you, you'd be dead right now," Blade said cruelly.
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Blade
"Ahem! That was very rude," I say, staring at Mary. I pull up my sleeve, to reveal my watch with many buttons. I carefully press a small one, then, on the touch screen, I push Mary Castro's name. I push the 'light' buttons. Mmmm, maybe a headache, dizziness... that's it for the first time. Okay, I press.
suddenly, Mary doubles over in pain, holding her head in her hands, and biting her lip. She groans, and tries to stand up, but with the dizzying effect, she falls to the floor.
"Aaahhg!" she mutters, holding her head in her hands, while kneeling on the floor. I push an 'increase level' button, but only by a bit. Still, her hands fly to her head, and she half screams, half whimpers. I cannot imagine what she's feeling. A part of me feels guilty, but I push that thought away.
"Now, Mary. I can stop your pain... But, are you sorry?" I say, and she spits at my feet. Just then, I notice all the youth staring at me, with a look of shock, and hate. Fear, that's what they need. "Are you sorry?" I repeat. When she says nothing, I go up a notch in pain. It's only at about 25/100 right now, but I don't want to overdue it. She screams.
"Sorry!" She spits at me quietly.
"I'm sorry, what? Louder!" I command.
"I'm sorry!" she says.
I slowly ease the pain meter down to zero, and nod at the guard. I noticed earlier, that all the kids had their wrist locks off. Before she can say anything, I lunge at her, and grab her left had, squeezing it. Finally, I open her fingers, and find a sharp nail. I grab it, and shove it into my own pocket, ziping it up.
"What was I saying," I ask, smiling sweetly. All the kids look shocked, and scared. The guards stand at the door, guarding it, and I stare at Mary, until she drops her gaze.
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Tabbitha- Bath room and hallway

The baths were amazing, I'll admit. The soap was good-smelling and I probably lost ten pounds' worth of dirt and grime from my skin and hair. But I didn't let my gaurd down completely. Knowing Blade, he probably had one of his lackeys lace the shampoo with a leathal toxin. I can imagine it now: my scalp soaking up the shampoo, having it enter my skull and brain, making me mad, like those cows a gaurd told me about when I was younger. I couldn't sleep for weeks afterward, imagining killer cows coming to get me.
However, my panicking was unwarrented, because even after I was done bathing, I did not feel much different. Also, the maid that helped me bathe, Anne, seemed like a nice woman, not someone that would poison you while you take a bath. But you never know...
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After the bath, we change into fresh uniforms and are escorted outside, where Blade is waiting with a malicious grin plastered on his face. I want to lash out, to rebel, but I know from expierence that that has no effect on Blade. Unfortunately, Mary does not. Without warning, she spits at his feet. With a sharp intake of breath, I wait for Blade to knock her down. Instead, he presses a button on his watch, and suddenly she doubles over in pain, holding her head with both hands in an iron grip. We all stare in shock and fear at the spectacle before us. Blade will be a bigger threat than even I couldn't imagine.
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Blade reaches to his watch, a malicious smile of someone who knows they are about to win, opening up his sharp cheek bones that shrouded his cruel blue eyes.

Mary stares at him, her eyes reflecting the loss and rage that brought with being in the pit, I knew I would like her, at least someone here wasn't beaten like what I was. I felt pity for her though, she is rebellious to heart but Blade was not just one man he had about the whole country behind them.

Blade is still looking at his watch and for a second I feel relief that she won't be punished, but a scream pierces through her as we stare in shock and my eyes burn with rage and fear. What does he think he's doing? Blade slowly releasing the torture and Mary whimpers at her feet.

I see Blade looking at me and quickly switch my gaze to the floor, I knew they thought I had a little bit of skill with weapons but they knew little. I have always been withdrawn and not one for idle conversation, I try not to show that I am smart, I don't know why, I guess it is a reflex action, because I don't relate to people per say.

I stop as Blade starts to speak.
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Blade
"Well, what an experience!" I exclaim, smiling maliciously. I stand up, and pull Mary to her feet, pushing her onto the couch. "Where was I? O yes. So, we are starting training tomorrow, so you will all need a good rest. Kalef, take the girls to their quarters. Calaf, you take the boys to theirs. Wake them up at 5:30 am sharp and take them to the dining hall. If they're late, they get no food," I say. Kalef pulls out an 'electric' rope. He grabs the plastic end, leaving the metal part hanging. He then arranges the girls hands on it. Each girl grabs on with one hand. As he presses the button, I see an electric blue color fill the metal. The girls only feel a slight shock, but when one tries to take her hand off, she struggles, and finds it stuck to the rope. Until the button is pressed again, they can't let go. Calaf does the same thing with the boys, but they are unwilling because of seeing the girls.
"At five thirty then sir!" says Calaf, and Kalef nods. They each pull their rope along, taking the girls and boys with them. The girls are at one far end, and the boys at the other.

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Kalef
I pull the girls along, but not too hard. I hate being in charge of girls... they always make me feel self conscious. I pull them to their room, which is quite nice. There are three soft beds, with sheets, two blankets, and two pillows. They are singles, but quite nice. I find Rebecca waiting there for them, holding three identical pj's.
"I leave them in your care," I say, passing her the plastic end of the electric rope. I walk out, locking the door with another electric lock. The windows are also secure.

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Calaf
I yank the boys along roughly while Blade smiles at me. Blade tells me to put it on the shock setting, which actually hurts. I do. He thinks I'm cruel, and mad like him, but I'm not. The boys are groaning, and trying to free themselves. As soon as I get around the corner, where Blade can't see, I turn it down to the lowest setting.
"Guys, I'm really sorry-" I begin.
"Sure you are," spits one of the boys.
"Look, I was like you once... Free. Not any more. I was also a 16 year old. I stayed in the same dungeons as you. I got whipped, and got treated cruelly. I know what you're feeling. I'm sorry..." I drop to a low whisper, "I'm going to help you guys, okay? You don't have to trust me yet... but just-- just try..." I say. The look of shock tells me that they didn't know about me. "And look, I'm going to trust you guys to not tell Blade, or I'm dead. I'm trying hard to find a way to get the chip out."
"The chip?"
"Yeah, it's something they planted in your back... Near your spine. It controls you... Like Mary, how she got pains? That was the chip. As long as you have it in you, you can't rebel... They could kill you."
"Ohhhh...."
"There are a lot of tests to pass soon... You guys have to trust me in this. Try to act dumb, stupid, and weak. Try to make mistakes, and sometimes act crazy or mad... try to create fights... If not Blade will kill you. He wants fighters." I keep pulling them along, till we get to their room. I open the gate, and let them in. As soon as they are in, I turn of the rope, and lock the door, but with a normal lock. If I lock us in with a real lock, I can't escape out for supplies.
"How do we know we can trust you?" asks the boy named Daniel.
"Watch," I say. There are three glasses of warm milk on a table. "Don't drink it. It has sleeping medicine. It's so you wake up late, and have to go without breakfast. At midnight, I'll bring you food. You'll eat it up, and then sleep. Then, in the morning, we'll pretend you slept in, and you won't get food.... Then, Blade thinks you'll be weak. Most of the kids that do this, do get weak... and die. Trust me, and eat everything you can stuff in your stomach when I bring it... and hydrate yourselves... it's hot out there." I say all this in a whisper.
"Prove it. Prove that the milk is bad." says Daniel critically. I thought someone would say that. I pull a mouse out of my pocket, and give it the milk. In a matter of seconds, it's fast asleep. They all nod. I really hope I don't get caught.
"Questions?" I ask.
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Tabbitha- Hallway & Girls' Dormitory


Still reeling from what I have just seen, when Kalef grabs my hand to put on the rope, I hardly notice, and numbly comply. I can feel a sort of dull version of fear settling in the pit of my stomache, or maybe dread. After a moment, however, I am jolted out of my zombie-like state by a mild- but not painless- shock. On instinct, I jerk away from the source of the discomfort- the rope my hand is holding. But, much to my horror, my hand is stuck to the rope. No matter how hard I try, my hand will not budge an inch. That's when I remembered what happened to Mary.

"You are doing this, aren't you?" I ask Blade, bitter amazement on the tip of my tongue.

"Well, technically, Kalef is, but yes." He looks straight at me, and shows his shark-like grimace. A shiver of fear runs down my spine.

"How...?" Is all I manage to say, my voice barely above a whisper. He just keeps on grinning. Fearing what will happen if I refuse to comply, if I fight again, I am led to the dormitories, no complaints or escape attempts to speak of.

We are led down a series of identical hallways, until we reach what I assume are the girls' dorms. Opening the door, Kalef leads us inside. The room is fairly nice, but not as lavish as the lobby we were first brought to. There are three beds, with pillows and blankets and everything. A woman named Rebecca helps us into our identical pj's, after Kalef has left, of course. After a while, we start to open up to each other, me, Mary, and Auburn. We talk about the boys we just met and what we think is going to happen to us, what Blade is planning. Eventually, we all drift asleep on the softest- and only- beds we remember sleeping on in our lives.
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Daniel - Bedroom

"Questions?" asks the guard. I look at Spencer and Kyler, and their faces tell me they don't have any.

"What's your name?" I ask.

"Calaf," he responds.

"Alright, look," I say to the guys. "I'm still pretty suspicious. For all we know, Blade could have told him to say this stuff. However, I don't see how it could hurt us to listen to him." I pick up the sleeping mouse from the table. "We'll have this little guy taste the food at midnight, just to be safe." They nod their approval. I turn to the guard, folding my arms as I said, "Ok, Calaf, we're in."
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If you haven't written lately, I would especially like the ones who have guy characters to write please!
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Spencer Mitchell- Hallway & Bedroom


We are somehow stuck to this electrical rope, no matter how hard I try, I just can't take my hand off of it. Then we walk into our room and are assigned pajamas to change into. The guard goes on about how he can help us, I don't know whether or not to trust him, but I decide to. We get changed and are assigned to one of the three beds in a row. I get the middle bed and then at about midnight, the guard comes back with food, not the slop we've been eating for years, but real food! I don't even know what it is actually called, but it is so good that I choke it all down before I can even ask. I do get out one question though, "You did warn the girls too right?" "No I didn't, I only deal with the boys and their guard won't help them." he tells me. After he leaves we thank him and go directly to the beds. They are very soft, at least to us, we've never had beds, at least not since we can remember. We drift off to sleep almost immediately. When I wake up, Daniel and Kyler are already up.

Bladewalks in laughing evily, "You all slept in." He smirks, "So no food for you, same thing with the girls." Calaf, the guard from last night brings us three identical outfits. Blade looks at us before exiting, "You have five minutes, if you're not back in 'The Office' by then, you will be in big trouble." We get dressed in comfortable, long, dark blue pants and short sleeve black T-shirts. We go to the office and sit on the couches, Blade stands in front of the seat before us he sat in yesterday. I wonder what this is all about, hopefully he'll finally tell us what we are training for. The girls walk in wearing the same outfits as us and they sit with us. The guards take their seats by the couches and Blade sits. He looks at us all and begins.
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Little change. Could you just slightly change your post JourneyGirl? I don't want the girls to have the option yet... They sleep in, and don't get food. I want it to be up to the boys to help them. The boys have to convince Calaf to help the girls too.... but Calaf is just here for the boys right now. If you have any question, or don't want to change it, PM me. thanks
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