Oh pancakes! You're making me lack vocabulary! I'm sure you did this on purpose because after reading this, all you can do is say "Awesome, awesome, awesome!"
Thanks an awesome lot for the awesome story that has so awesomely brainwashed me into constantly and awesomely repeating 'awesome'.
when she needs to shelter from reality she takes a dip in my daydreams
I'm not gonna lie. This is pretty awesome. At first, the word awesome seemed overused and bugged me, but this was pretty funny and had a good message about being unique and all that crap. The unique thing is sort of cliche (reread that sentence, kind of ironic) but this was really funny, so who cares? I didn't find any grammar issues, other than the fact that I don't think awesomeness is a word, although it might be. Anyway, keep it up, because this is funny.
"It is a far, far better thing that I do, than I have ever done; it is a far, far better rest that I go to, than I have ever known..." A Tale of Two Cities, by Charles Dickens.
Hahaha. This story, actually, is a perfect example of Mary Sue/Gary Stu syndrome. I am going to have to quote this for future critiques of mine! After all, sometimes this story is only a slight exaggeration.
Also, I did not give you permission to write about my life! How dare you!
You'll be talking to my lawyer, I assure you...
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.
"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach
Before clicking on it, I thought 'Most Awesome Story Ever? that is a title that someone would use to make people read it. That is stupid, not even imaginative. WHY is this featured?' (no offence intended) Then I started reading. First paragraph, I start liking it. But still, why is a story like that featured? I KEEP READING. Non-believers shrink in the glory? mmm.... This guy is awesome, but he is so awesome that he has no personality at all. Then he is lonely. HAH! Moralism! Waaaay cooler than that Aesop guy. Way cooler. So, you finally understand. You are alone in your power. And the woman comes in with her notsoawesome hairdo and notsoawesome clothes. She is awesome, in a different way. She, in my opinion, MORE awesome than the man. Because, she has a personality. She is a real person. And they live awesomely ever after. I love it.
You know what?
YOU'RE AWESOME.
Bad souls have born better sons, better souls born worse ones -St Vincent
I had the same misgivings as a lot of people when I started reading this, before I discovered the awesome awesomeness of this awesome tale. This is one of those pieces that is made entirely for laughs, which can be harder to do than they look sometimes, and I can't really find anything to nitpick (GASP!). And I always find things to nitpick! Plus the fact that you also crammed a moral into all that awesomeness? Dang, you have GOT to keep this up!
Consider me a fan!
"We need not to be let alone. We need to be really bothered once in a while. How long is it since you were really bothered? About something important, about something real?"
I won't go on and on about how much I liked this. (But I did!) The other reviewers have taken care of that for me. My one complaint was that the word awesome wasn't used enough! (I'm kidding, of course. But it does make me want to try to make a complete sentence conjugating awesome.) The unawesome awesome girl was my favorite character. Keep writing awesomely! Awesome awesomedly awesomed awesomers. I don't even know what that means.
sheer force of awesomeness.....not " force of sheer awesomeness"
I found your story quite similiar and not very original to other stories i have read in the past. Your story made me realize how many times a person can put the word awesome,awesomeness, and so on into a story
I also found your story to be very irritating and annoying in the sense of the word being repeated sooooooo many times.
Try harder next time to think outside the box......because i definetly found this piece to be very immature.
Main Point: TRY A NEW IDEA. and please be more creative with your plots......
I swear, my favorite line was "The wedding was awesome." xD I loved this story, it was funny and different. Using the word "awesome" so much made the word itself tedious, but it's all good.
This made me laugh. I liked the humor and the nice message in the end. So, I think I might read some of your other works because you said they were funnier.
I'm oxygen potassium! What's life without adventure?
I find it quite upsetting that people flock to something like this putting it on the featured section while many other original pieces that people poured their heart and soul into are left languishing in the shadows.
It's not a slight on the poster, you're doing your thing, it wasn't something I particularly enjoyed but putting that aside I'm more disappointed in the members here for their short sighted reviewing. We're supposed to be writers, visionaries, the idea that this is the best the site has to offer is laughable and something I know not to be true.
In review of the piece I would suggest trying to push the boundaries a little more, words are a powerful things and there is no reason why something can't be light and comical whilst also being well crafted and intelligent. This seems like something that was thrown together in 20 minutes. I wouldn't recomment wasting anymore time on this piece, others might be fobbed off with it's tiresome repetition but as someone who takes pride in what I do I'd say try harder next time. You can have as many likes as people here can throw at you but are you really proud of this?
This awesome story was so awesome that I can't stop thinking about how awesome it was! Literally, awesomeness just exploded out of the computer screen the whole time I was reading. AWESOME!
WE ARE DAUGHTERS of our Heavenly Father, who loves us, and we love Him.
