The Path of Destruction

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I decided to veer away from stories for a moment and wrote a poem about the path of destruction.

All is lost,
But losing is nothing.
When nothing is left,
That could ever be lost.

Because all is gone,
And behind us is destruction.
Created from our own hands,
This destructive path be taken.

Awoken from our own fears,
And brought forth into the world.
To wreak havoc as intended,
Among restless souls.

A war be started,
To pass the time.
To waste the money,
And clear the road.

When destruction fails,
And fear loses meaning.
Nowhere to turn to,
On this rugged path.

So fate be with us,
The journey be bold.
For the end is near,
Our story be told.

On this path that we take,
There's no turning back.
For the path of destruction,
Is a one way road.
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I'm not quite sure I agree with "Destruction being a one way road." But other than that it's a good poem. I'll give you 5 out of 10




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Very good. I think you're speaking about death? Sorry if I am mistaken.

The poem is really pretty. I wish I could write poems the same as you. C:
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All is lost,But losing is nothing.When nothing is left,That could ever be lost.Nice one:)
Because all is gone,And behind us is destruction.Created from by sounds more proper in this context to meour own hands,This destructive path be taken.
AwokenAwaken sems to flow better from our own fears,And brought forth into the world.To wreak havoc as intended,Among restless souls.
A war bemaybe you wrote it like this for an effect, and it does give an effect, but flows better as will start/ shall start started,To pass the time.To waste the money,And clear the road.
When destruction fails,And fear loses meaning.Nowhere to turn to,On this rugged path.I liked this one too:)
So fate be with us,The journey be bold.For the end is near,Best para:)Our story be told.

The rhyming was very good:) Very nicely described and perfect pace. Hope my review helps:)
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Thanks for the feedback so far. I don't write poetry that often.
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Before I joined the Young Writer's Society, I had no idea poetry could be so...EPIC. Wow.
For the story, I would give you nine stars.
For the writing mechanics, I would give you six stars, since the flow is jarred a little, here and there.
(But the story is the important part. ;) )
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Wow this good I love destroying things




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Path of Destruction is a really nice dramatic poem abou someting destructive, as the title tells. It is well consructed and very miserable. I really like it but I think it may need some work, not much though. It doesn't have many rhyming words but the lines follows a certain order which makes it flow really well. All in all I really like the poem. It is destructive and predictive. Good work and keep writing, after all writers are made, not born.



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