Error 401

Did you mean to use 401 or 403? 401 means you either typed in the wrong username, password, or both. 403 means you don't even have a chance to type in a username/password; you are absolutely forbidden from accessing the site.

Actually, I'm pretty sure you meant 404. 404 is that you typed in the wrong URL or tried to go to a page that doesn't exist. Hence, the page wouldn't be able to be found. It comes the closest to what you say at the beginning of the poem.

^_^ 401 - Failure to authenticate to server. I thought maybe my connection had timed out, but it appeared to be my university's fault for timing out my connection just as I was loading the page. Pretty sucky at the time, and I honestly was unsure of the cause of 401 at the time.

I think the first two lines are strange with the rest of the poem. I don't quite like it. Either, I would try to integrate it into the poem more or just nix it.

I think the last stanza is a little preachy and annoying. Also, the last line doesn't quite make sense grammatically:

It's dismissable - not a problem; for a world without the internet is unimaginable to most, yet for me, it starts with Error(401).

The question is, how does the Error 401 actually cause the internet to be unimaginable to most? That is what you're saying, right? So that definitely needs to be cleaned up.

Happy editing!

this is great

Eldermimi ->> Coolness! I forgot to say that I did enjoy this poem.

Oh Em Gee this is way awesome. I love the quote from error 401 at the beginning. It's way cool. Awesome job!!!

really, really liked this

keep up the writing

~ Tinkem

So true. Not much to say about this poem, except, great job. It's awesome and intriguing and relatable. I like it. Keep it up.

Now I'm jealous. You got a review from Nate. You truly must be Superman.

Kafkaescence wrote:Now I'm jealous. You got a review from Nate. You truly must be Superman.

You have no idea how special I feel *satisfied purr*.

No real review as of now. I cannot get on Writersfeed due to this very problem. D:

Makes me want to shoot the laptop. BUT I WILL NOT. I'll come back later and give this a proper review.


Just a convenient time for me to notice it.

Wow. A lot of reviews on this one, huh? I can see why. Your poem was epic. xP I like how you turned a crappy run in with the internet into a sweet story like this. My favorite part was in the beginning:

I'm sorry. Truly I am,
for the poem you seek
is lost in the webs
of a billion silicon spiders.

I thought the spider reference was cool. I really like what you did there. Great job on this! Even if my review is so behind from the time you posted this. I'm glad I discovered such cool poetry.