The beginning started off well, with a enough detail, not a lot of detail. You could add more description to the city. I understood it towards when the dude was reading the sign. After that I was lost, you should have added more detail then. I sort of understood, but not actually. You should just redo the following part after the introduction, and add more detail. You should also add a part that makes the Masquerader seem majestic and mysterious. On to the next review, Card Dragon!
"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach
