Fire Girl Chapter 1

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Hi BookGirl! I was going to look at part three, but I realized I hadn't actually read the first two. Let's change that, shall we? ;)

First, a couple of typos!

Jon and I normally don't sit beside each other, a few times maybe but mot all the time. <-- most, not mot.

I was putted away my English homework <-- putting, not putted.

All right!

I don't really quite believe that she's an outcast. I was an outcast a long way back, and it was much more miserable. She's more of a chameleon, if that makes sense. That is, she can think of herself as an outcast, but I don't really buy it. ;)

I find it really weird that Jon would even say yes. Or, that Lex wouldn't react to Carla saying that Jon was going out with her. I mean, if my sister just told me that she was going out with my best guy friend and that she expected me to do her biology homework, I would probably slap her. Or something. I would be jealous, even though I knew that he wasn't mine. So her lack of reaction looks a little weird!

I think my dad would KILL me if he saw this guy jumping on me and wrestling with me as a 16-year-old. I don't what this dad is like, of course, but it just seems a bit off to me.

Anyway, just a couple of thoughts! To chapter 2, yes? :)
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