*is greatly tempted by the sheer awesomeness, but doesn't want to put you through the torture* Umm... can I get back to you? Ribbit is awesome though, by the way.
Also, sorry this is kinda pointless... I just thought I'd drop by and reveal my dilemma.
Because Skins could not offer her work for a review, I will kindly offer mine. /awkwardpoemreference
Please review the story The Law of Moses. About the story: it is 18+, it is magical realism, and I recently regained faith in it so I'd like another review.
I would like you to PM the review to me, because I don't want to resurrect that old thread. In the review, please focus on the language and the sentence structure, but I would also like an overall opinion of the plot.
For all these steep requirements, I sent you 500 points. Ribbit is awesome.
I'm on it, Carbon! Already read it and am working on the review now. It might take me a day or two because I'm swamped in the Real World, but I'll get there.
I don't fangirl. I fandragon.
Have you thanked a teacher lately? You should. Their bladder control alone is legend.
It's an entry for the Song Prompt contest, a science fiction story based on the song 'Rolling in the Deep' by Adele (it's fine if you haven't heard the song, otherwise there's a link to the music video in the beginning spoiler).
I had a blast writing it, but after the one review I've gotten on it, it seems it wasn't as fantastic as I believed it was while writing it. XD And I'm starting to see that now, after reading through it, but I'd like a second opinion before I revise it some more, so any insights you have would be welcome.
Thanks! ^^
"Pay Attention. Pay Close Attention to everything, everything you see. Notice what no one else notices, and you'll know what no one else knows. What you get is what you get. What you do with what you get is more the point. -- Loris Harrow, City of Ember (Movie)
TITLE: 2 | Wicked Medicine (a scene from my novel, the Labyrinth Experiment) GENRE: Science Fiction (though borderline Fantasy in some parts, its more like Star Wars then Star Trek, if that makes sense) LINK: topic82614.html
The first scene: topic82336.html (You do not need to read this for Wicked Medicine to make sense but it would help should you choose to read on. Also it's fairly short, 521 words, and you do not have to review if you don't want to)
I posted what I love to know up at the top of each, basically I want to know any questions, predictions and theories you may have about what's going to happen... though I really like the whole conversational thing you provide, so I'll be happy with that. (I just like knowing what's going on in my reader's head.)
Thanks!
Also (Ribbit is awesome)
.:~|The Red Ink Emporium!|~:. "What's the point of being grown-up if you can't act childish sometimes?"
I've finally decided to actually grace you with my presence on this thread for an actual reason. For that, I apologise. I have a kinda big ask, you see.
Would you mind reviewing a random, pretty far in part of my novel? I thought you'd be the best person to ask because you're good with the grammatical stuff, and I'd especially like to be critiqued on my phrasing because I'm terrible at it. If you are happy to do this, there's a summary of the novel at the top of the post, so that should help you out.
I hear, a little birdy told me, that you do awesome reviews. I'm here to make aure that little birdy was telling the truth, not that he would tell lies but--
Anyway, I wrote this piece for a competition on the emotion love and I'd love a look at it if you don't mind.
If you do mind that it's not a problem at all.
Anyhow, thanks!
Kagi xx
Got YWS?
If, when you mean to type yes you type yws, you know you belong.
I was actually going to leave this for a day or two because I feel guilty asking again so soon, but then I remembered how being one of the last few to review makes you want to cry... So yeah, I thought I'd better ask sooner rather than later.
Basically, when you find the time, would you mind reviewing the latest part of my novel for me? post889198.html#p889198
