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Yo,
I don't review grammar, and I don't comment on plot. I do look at sentence structure, internal consistency of the story's logic, narrative rhythm, and various nuances which may catch my eye.

genres:I will accept all fiction genres even if I hate them. No poetry pls.
length: The shorter the thing, the more likely I am to give it my whole attention. If I give up halfway, I'll honestly indicate this. You can try feeding me longer stuff by pieces.
Last edited by napalmerski on Sun Apr 11, 2010 7:50 am, edited 1 time in total.
she got a dazed impression of a whirling chaos in which steel flashed and hacked, arms tossed, snarling faces appeared and vanished, and straining bodies collided, rebounded, locked and mingled in a devil's dance of madness.
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Hi I would like a review for my story for which I have posted prologue, chapter 1 and 2.

A Criminal's Heart-Prologue
A Criminal's Heart Chapter-1(OLIVIA)
Chapter-2

You may just read the prologue and chapter 1. I want a review more fir chapter
"Next time you point a finger
I might have to bend it back
Or break it, break it off
Next time you point a finger
I'll point you to the mirror"

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Ok Shubhi,
I'll do it on the weekend!
she got a dazed impression of a whirling chaos in which steel flashed and hacked, arms tossed, snarling faces appeared and vanished, and straining bodies collided, rebounded, locked and mingled in a devil's dance of madness.
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Yo, Shubhi,
I've done what I can,I hope all this helps.
she got a dazed impression of a whirling chaos in which steel flashed and hacked, arms tossed, snarling faces appeared and vanished, and straining bodies collided, rebounded, locked and mingled in a devil's dance of madness.
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Thank you Napalmerski....Your reviews have helped me a lot. Thanks a lot. I have posted chapter 2 and 3 also if you want to read and don't mind reviewing!
"Next time you point a finger
I might have to bend it back
Or break it, break it off
Next time you point a finger
I'll point you to the mirror"

— Paramore




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OK Shubhi, but in a few days :D
she got a dazed impression of a whirling chaos in which steel flashed and hacked, arms tossed, snarling faces appeared and vanished, and straining bodies collided, rebounded, locked and mingled in a devil's dance of madness.
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Hey could you do this? Thanks! http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post684136.html#p684136
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

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Sure:) come the weekend, I'll review your story!
/and yours too, Shubi :elephant: /
she got a dazed impression of a whirling chaos in which steel flashed and hacked, arms tossed, snarling faces appeared and vanished, and straining bodies collided, rebounded, locked and mingled in a devil's dance of madness.
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