Rate the first sentence above you

Here are the rules: Post the first sentence of your novel. The next person to post will rate your sentence on a scale of 1 to 10 and then post the first line of their own novel. And on and on it goes. :D

Ready? Go!

There was another dead calf in the pasture that morning.

Good idea!


8.5

It grabs attention, you want to read at least to the end of the paragraph, but I don't like to think of dead calves :'(

I live to fight and I fight to live.

Excellent idea for a thread.

tnme - 6. I feel like it's not the best opener, it might work better later into a paragraph. It's sort of in a spoken cliche format, so I don't think it would be best to begin a novel/story in this manner.


"Every morning when Jude Paschal first appraised himself in the mirror, he flinched."

6.

A little bit cliche, but still interesting.



That pretty pair of cocoa-colored eyes is worth roughly half my tuition.

Lyrical, was that at me or TNME? I noticed we posted our replies at almost the exact same time, so I'm just curious. XD

As for your opener - 9. I think it's really interesting. I would definitely read at least to the end of the page.

siobhan, I reckon yours is about a 7. In itself it is not the most attention-grabbing sentence, but it is one of those can that lead onto an almost infinite number of possibilities... and my mind wanders again lol.

The first thing she noticed was the cold.

5
I see that line way too much.

The crimson silk bellowed as the wind whistled; petals dance and dance again.

Very pretty and lyrical, but personally I like something that grabs your attention right off the bat. Just my opinion, though. 6/10

Those pretty cocoa-colored eyes are worth roughly half my tuition.

8.5

Very interesting and a good attention-getter, but allusions to plastic surgery make me cringe.

"Are there any assassins in the crowd, Kirani?"

Sweeet. 8, Rosey.

Haha - it's actually not an allusion to plastic surgery, but I get why you would think that.


They hate the fog.

I'll give it a 7, because it at leasts makes me wonder who 'they' are, and why they share the same revulsion of air moisture.

“Here, take this, it’ll put the rosy back in your cheeks.”

8. It sounds good, and leads to many possibilities. Also sounds a bit strange.

The world exploded around the knife.

9.

It has so many possibilities, and it has explosions and edged weapons. My kind of line. ^_^

The rock grated and screeched, threatening to cave in the tunnels around me.

8

sounds cool.

Tick Tick Tick, The clock rang as the time passed.

6.5/10 - The ticking could've been reduced to only one 'tick' and it probably would be better off as so...but that's just my take of course.

Mine: from my finished 2008 novel It's in the Blood-

It was on.