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Done again Lord Anzius! :) oh and just a note to say I may not be on top of my reviews as much as usual as it is the purple vs blues war so I need to switch to greeting! I will get round to any reviews wanted but just may be a bit slower :P
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Hello again!

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Done once more! :D I think the witch is really good evil character ;) hope the review was helpful!
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Hi, could you please review these.

topic49032.html
topic48988.html

It's a two part story so make sure you do them in that order.

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Hippie- Both done :D I loved your writing style for both although I'm sorry the review for the second part may not be as detailed as I couldn't find much that could be improved at all!
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Hello

May I ask for a review please? It's pretty long but it's ok if you just comment on the first part, which is where the problem I see is.

It's here

Thanks!

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I reviewed the opening part to your story Tuna and gave some suggestions on how I think you could make it more gripping- I did read the rest though as well and thought that your story was really good! The descriptions you do use are very beautiful, if you want me to go over any other parts in it then I would be happy to as well :)
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Pipzie! I need your help! I posted the remake of the chapter one of my story and it got ignored for some reason :(
I need help and honest advice since I want to make it goood!

topic49260.html

thanks :)
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Pip sir, I'm glad you really did give me a review on the problem I was having.

I'm still constantly changing and fixing and updating that piece, so if you feel like giving me more advice on that one in the future, please do so!

Well, not really now but, like later on when the changes I'll be making will make you want to just say something about it.

I'm also eager to put the first chapter in, but since it's heavily influenced by the prologue, I'll post it when I think the prologue's truly 'done'.

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Mimz- Done! :D I loved it, I made a few suggestions but you know how picky I can be :P could you let me know when more is up? I haven't read any of your work in so long! Oh and sorry it took me a while, haven't been able to be on yws as much as before due to exams but should be back properly in a week :)

Tuna- so glad I helped! I did really enjoy it so just let me know whenever you want anymore of my opinion on it or the next part :) hope to read more soon!
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Heya! I'm back!

I put my first chapter up
topic49603.html


Or if you want to have another look at the prologue, since I added and reduced some parts there.


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Crouching Tuna- Done! :D I thought it was a really good chapter! Sorry for the longness of the review :P If I have time I'll look back over the prologue again later :)
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Pippie! *chants*

Would you please take a look at my new novel?

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Kat- Done! :D I like your beginning and hope you carry on with it :) I did make some suggestions but as always ignore me if you think differently, I thought it was a really good piece :D
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Title: Blood
Genre: Historical
Link: topic49698.html

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