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Hello there.

I'm Pop. If you'd like a critique from me, then please, feel free to post away.
If you're looking for something in particular, say, a review mainly focused on character development, then all you have to do is ask. Otherwise, I'll just give you an overall review including description, setting, character development, plot, originality and impression. I'll also give a review on grammar, but I don't particularly enjoy doing that (that's what the spell check is for).

Please keep in mind that I have a tendency to be a bit harsh when I review, so don't take it personally.
Normally, it just means I like what you've written and I want you to make it better.

I can only take five requests a week. If I can finish the first five before the end of the week, I will take additional requests.
However, it may be a while before I can get to your review. Unfortunately, I have a life outside of YWS and it calls upon me sometimes.

I Will Review:
Whatever you'd like.
Granted, I'm not so great with poetry (with the exception of narrative), so you may not want to offer up your lyrical or dramatic poetry. I don't mind Fan-fiction, but if I've never heard of the show/game/etc., then it'll obviously be difficult for me to follow along.
Other than that, anything is fine with me.

Please post your work with the title, genre, and link included.
If you need the review before a set date, let me know and I'll make sure I get to your request first.

Have at it!


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Last edited by anti-pop on Tue Apr 14, 2009 5:27 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Hey there!

It's your turn to rip MY story apart! Please? :)

Title: The Balcony
Genre: Other fiction (Hope that's ok, it wasn't mentioned)
Link: topic35160.html




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can you review this for me?

topic31457.html - it the prolouge.
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Hey guys!

Thanks for posting. I'll get to them ASAP ;)
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Lupis- done!
Mistress- working on it!
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changing holds
cynicism the new norm...

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Mistress - finished!
scasha - getting to it ;)
...Bitter cold, it grows
changing holds
cynicism the new norm...

-Libretto




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scasha - finished! Amazing work! :D
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changing holds
cynicism the new norm...

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Could you review this for me, please? It's a first chapter and so needs a lot of work.
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here is two more.

topic32635.html - this is chapter one.

topic32712.html - chapter 2
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TL & Mistress - I'll get to yours as soon as possible. It's snowing here so I'm having a bit of fun outside :D
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*bats eyelashes*
Genre: Other Fiction
Title: Dr./Mr. Vangerguard-Milton
Link: topic40484.html
Please, be as harsh as you need to be. Much appreciated ;-)
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Chapter 1 - topic40209.htmla

Chapter 2 - topic40419.html

Only chapter 2 needs a review but if you want to do both and compare or whatever, that's fine by me. As long as you review chapter 2 i'll be happy to give you whatever you like! Review/food/nod of the head

Yeah, that's all good remember chapter 2 is what i really want haha!!!
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TL - almost done
Mistress - working on it
kissthewitch - getting to it

Thanks so much for waiting. Sorry for the long delay...holidays are so busy!
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topic36822.html

When you've got time and all, thank you very much. :D
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