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Bella

'Well this is my new home' I thought as I stood in front of Charlie’s house. The streets of Forks seemed to be a lot quieter than it was when I used to come here in the summer. My Dad stood behind me.

"Are you coming to see your room?" he asked as he led me inside. We went up the creaking stairs and went into a room with an oak door. It was small and and decorated.

"I’m going to get you some purple bed sheets, you like purple don’t you?" My father asks.

"Purples cool" I replied.

We went out side and there stood Jacob and Billy. I smile at Jacob; hopefully he'll be coming my school.

"Bella you remember Billy black, don’t you?" said Charlie

"Umm.....Yeah sort of" I reply,

"Well him and Jacob repaired your move in present" He said as he pointed at the car near him,

"For me! Really, Oh my god" I said as I got in the car with Jacob." I could give you a lift to school?"

"Umm... I don’t go that school" Said Jacob

"Oh was hoping I would no someone" I smiled and drove off.

I parked my car in the grounds of the school and walked along.

“Nice car” laughed a jerk,

“Thanks” I replied as him and the cheerleader whispered.

A young boy that looked near my age walked up to me.

“Hello I’m Eric, what would you want to do first? Date? Tour?”

“Umm.. I don’t know” I reply.
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Alice got out of the car and walked with Jasper into the house holding his arm as they went. He was tense like he always seemed to be around the humans. It was understandable, he was the newest to the vegitarian way of life. Alice glanced at the new girl and then turned forward as she kept going. New people in this town always caused a ruckas.

Good, it will keep them from paying attention to us. She thought.

"They are always watching and paying attention to us." Edward said walking up along side her. He had said it in a low voice that only their family could hear.

"I'm sure all the guys at least will pay attention to her. It's a new girl, someone they haven't chased yet. I'm sure you know abotu that from hearing everyone think about it." She smiled.

"I'm sure you know all abotu her future too, Alice." He smirked.

"No, actually I haven't bothered to look. She's just a new girl who probably will leave soon because she got tired of all the attention." Alice shrugged with a smile. "No, need to pay attention to her future. It doesn't run into ours, so I'm not worried. Course you know how quickly it could all change."
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[[[Not posting yet because it's so not the right time for Tobias to appear, lol, but I wanted to say one thing: Echelon, stick to one tense :P You go past-tense, present-tense, past, present... lmao.]]]




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I always have trouble with that hehe.
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(I'm mixing it up just a tad. Don't want to go along with an exact story-line, but it's the same characters and major events.)

Mike:

I spotted her as she walked into the school. She was like a foreign flower, and I noticed just how delicate she was when she tripped over her own feet and fell flat on her face in the hallway. Everyone passed her by, while I rushed over toward her and helped her to her feet.

"A bit clumsy, aren't you? I'm Mike Newton. You must be Isabella Swan." The girl brushed herself clean, then offered her hand to shake.

"I'm Bella Swan, actually." She looked very pretty. I decided to make small talk.

"So, where are you from?"

"Phoenix, Arizona."

"Your a bit pale to be from Arizona. Are you albino or something?"
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*of course not, i dont ether*

"Umm..no, just pale" She replyed.Eric came and stood next to her.
"So you met my girl, Bella" He said with a grin.
"Your girl Bella" Mike laughed as he helped Bella carry some books. Bella was surounded by boys. A gang of pale students walked past and caught Bella's eye.

"Dont even try bella, they are strange" Said Mike as Edward looked at him.

There was something about the one walking on his own. His eyes were black. He held his nose as if he had smelt something bad. Do I really smeel that bad i asked myself.
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Jasper:

"Ugh! What is that horrid stench?" I whispered to Alice. I found it rather cute that she looked offended.

"I don't smell bad to you? You don't want to eat me?", she joked.

"It's that new girl, I'm guessing.", I looked over at her and gave the girl an evil glare, making her shrink into her seat.

"Are you talking about Bella?", Edward whispered to himself on the lunch line, but I could easily pick out his voice and hear it.

"Yes." Alice knew who I was talking to and her ears perked up.

"She smells the worst to me, you have no idea.", he chuckled to himself without humor. It was almost a painful laugh.
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*if ayumigosi(what ever her name is) if she dont come online somebody will have to take over Edward, we need him*

I felt upset. he just kept looking at me. Did I smell. Was I really ugly. They walked past.

"Who are they?" I asked

"The Cullens." said Angela

Jessica replys "They're um, Dr. and Mrs. Cullen's foster kids, they moved down here
from Alaska like, a few years ago"

Angela waffles "They, kinda keep to themselves."

Jessica Says degusted "Yeah 'cause they're all together, like TOGETHER together. Uh,
the blonde girl, that's Rosalie, and the big dark-haired guy Emmett, they're like a thing, I'm not even sure that's legal."

"Jess, they're not actually related." Angela whispered whispered

"Yeah, but they live together it's weird-and, okay, the little dark-haired girl is Alice, she's REALLY weird, and, um, she's with Jasper the blonde one who looks like he's in pain." Jessica whispers back.

I glare at Edward but he notices and stares back. Our eyes linked I cant move them. It was like he was trying to read me.

"We have biology next dont we?"I asked Eric who came and sat next to me.

"Yeah babe i think you have" He replys but doesnt have my full attention.
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***Ayumi won't be on. I'll play Edward for her until she gets back. But you can't take the character from her***

Alice looked over at Edward. "Your being rude." She said in a low whisper. Jasper chuckled. "I was talking to Edward."

"She's different." Edward said. She shrugged and leaned against Jasper smiling at him.

"She's human, their all different. Different smells, different looks, different thoughts, religions, tastes...."

"I think he gets it." Jasper chuckled. She smiled and stood up and walked to where Edward was Jasper following right behind her.

"Relax, Edward, I'll watch you. If anything is about to happen I'll come get you." She smiled.

"That's really comforting, Alice." He said trying to smile up at her.

"She'll get me, I'll be able to get you." Emmett said as him and Roselie walked to their classes.



*~*Edward*~*

Edward jumped up and walked to his next class. Biology. He smiled as he slipped into his seat. No one ever sat next to him. He glanced up when he smelled her. What was she doing in her.

"There is only one seat left." The teacher said. Edward growled to himself, that one seat was next to him. He looked down and took a pencil from his bag. As long as he dind't have to talk he didn't have to breath, and he didn't have to smell her. SHe slipped into the seat next to him and glanced over at him. He didn't look at her though. He searched for her thoughts, but they weren't there!


***I think we should kinda base this more on the book then the movie, it's so much better. :P ***
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**no because I haven't read the book, and me and her have talked im deffently letting her keep her character**

Isabella Swan

I sat down next to Edward, he looked like he had smelt a bad smell. evrytime I looked at him he seemed to be covering his nose. Was that me. I smelt my red wollen jumper. Did I smell. He pushed the work over to my side of the desk. looking at me as he did it.I felt uncomftable.
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Edward:

"Your Isabella Swan, right?" He asked. There goes not breathing. He growled at himself.

"How'd you know that?" She asked surprised looking at him like he was crazy for talking to him.

"It's a small town." He smiled.

"Right." her cheeks flared and the smell of her blood got stronger.

"But it's just Bella?" HE asked with another smile.

"Y-ya." She replied.

"I'm Edward Cullen." he smiled. She nodded with a smile.
Last edited by TNCowgirl on Thu Dec 18, 2008 2:27 am, edited 1 time in total.
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*Tncowgirl that happens the next time they see each other because he actually introduces himself, i would like to follow that and not rush the storybook too much, please edit your post*
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***There, but I'll warn you right now. I dont member much about the movie, only the book. In the book he doesn't even say anything to her the first day. I also thought we weren't following it completely. :P Just let it go as it goes***
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***I'm back. My dad's okay. He's home.

***And, personally, I prefer the book's storyline. It's better. But, either way, Edward didn't say a word to Bella at all the first day of school, in the book or movie. Then he was gone for several days, out feeding so he could control his thirst around her. If you want to correct that yourself (TNCowgirl), feel free; PM me your decision.

By the way, thanks.***
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okay i'm lost...this is too confuseing, i have to drop out. *ekk*
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