~Melkor's delivery service~

So I figured I have a lot more to give to the forum, other than general meaness and incoherent posting.
(Not much more mind you.;p)

So I thought I'd start with increasing my review count by at least two hundred...and then possibly becoming a instructor.(it's not just for the purple...honest)

So.....

Who wants a nice risky review?

I have no real rules, I just ask for a link to the story, and perhaps a please...or at least a polite nod....


No stabbing...not just yet.....

Usually, I'll be inclined to use my reviewing system, as shown below, but that depends on how much I like the story, or how tired I am at that moment.


1. Readability - How easy your story is to read. A good story will obviously be much easier to read than a bad one.
Flow of words /3
Thoughts conveyed well /3
Overall feeling /3
How well each topic flows from paragraph to paragraph /1


Overall /10

2. Description - How well described your story was, including the language you use.
Good/over use of words: /3
Accurate/poor description: /3
Atmosphere /3
Description used /1

Overall /10

3.Originality - How original the story is. If it's been done before this will be low.
Concept: /3
Wording: /3
Creativity(Creatures, places) /3
Inventive /1

Overall /10

4.Confusion? - was this story easy to understand?
Use of words /3
Use of storyline /3
Ability to continue flow of story without jumping too much /3
Impression to the reader /1

/10

5.Spelling/Grammar - You lose a point for every spelling mistake you make. All the more reason to consult the editing department!

Half a point per mistake

Overall /10

(Reviewers should also give a comment on each section)

Overall /50

Comments:

All deliveries made by Chocobo or dragon (if it's a rainy day).

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You may pet the dragon. but not the chocobo

OMG chocobo. Aww, I can't pet it? Oh well.

Could you look this over, pretty please? If you like it, feel free to read the first two, but otherwise it should make alright sense on its own.
Title: The Zipper of My Pants (part 3)
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Thanks

-Nutty

PS I think I have some Sylkis greens around here somewhere...

Nutty wrote:

PS I think I have some Sylkis greens around here somewhere...

Don't EVEN think about it.

Sure....Just give me a week at most...I should have time on monday.

It's done.


Thank you very much.
By which I mean you may get the heck out.


WHO IS NEXT?

I want to pet the chocobo *reaches hand out, but chocobo snaps at it*

Here is the story:
topic40339.html

No-one pets the chocobo.
It's all done.

Okay, I learned my lesson.

Here's another one if you dont mind.

topic37319.html

Okay, time for you to read something of mine.
topic40372.html

here is something of mine.

topic31457.html

Historical fiction:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post470509.html#470509

It is called Ashurbanipal

Right.....So....

Nightmistress....as much as I hate your avatar, i have finsihed your review...

Lord anzius, your review has been completed...sorry i'm late....

Kaylyn..

It is done..and it made my day too!!!!

ANY MORE TAKERS???

Can you please critique mine?
topic41470.html
I just posted is, hope you enjoy it =]

Can we feed the Chocobo and the dragon or is it a no feeding policy like the zoo?

topic41895.html

Might want to skim over the previous two installments first, but it's not too complicated, so depends how much time you have.

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