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(I'll wait and see what happens unless you need me)
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***Vampy, read Velna's profile. I doubt someone would wlk up to her and tlk to her like tht. I think my 'a' messed up.***
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[Marjorie Thorne - can see the future]

Marjorie quietly crossed the square and walked out of the village and into the forest. The smell of damp earth underneath her feet and the russle of fallen leaves was all that surounded her. A young deer stood a few yards away from Marjorie, nibbling on grass, ears perking up at the slightest of sounds. She closed her eyes for a moment and saw the same deer, lying dead on a butchers table. The lone souless eyes staring back at her, Marjorie quickly opened her eyes the images dissapeared.

"Be careful where you tread," Marjorie whispered as she began walking again.

She stepped on a broken branch creating a craking sound and making the deer spring off. Just ahead was a clearing in the middle of the forest, the clearing was compleately covered in beautiful red roses. Without the noise of the city it was the perfect place to read the future.

As Marjorie stepped into the clearing the sound of footsteps were behind her. Had there been someone following?

"Whoever you are," began Marjorie as she sat down in the field. "if you have something to say to me just say it."
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Our happiness here is all vain glory,
This false world is but transitory,
The flesh is weak, the Fiend is slee
Timor mortis conturbat me.
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** Okay TN. You want her to just meet Velna? **
Some say laughing is the best medicine but what do you do when you can't laugh anymore?

Multiple personalities are just good social skills.




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Seda-

He picked through the wreckage of the warehouse. Seda stiffened as he saw a girl's body lying under the debris, she was breathing but barely.

**agh! I can't think of anything.**
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LOVE- Like you've never been hurt
SING- Like no-one is listening
LIVE- Like it's heaven on earth.

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Kumiko

She rushed by his side, looking nervous. She crouched beside the rubble where the girl's hand was barely visible. She lightly touched it.

"Please come back," she whispered to the girl.

The pile started to move and the girl's hand slowly withdrew.

"Quick, we've got to help her!" someone shouted, as everyone ran gingerly into the pile, so as not to step upon her and started lifting away the rubble.
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**That'll work**
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Name- Double N, (has no name get it No Name Answers to D.N or N or even Nen, Or just No Name

Age- 15

Gender- Male

Appearance-Glowing - white hair, blue eys, golden skin, angel looking

Power- Turns into adifferent person. Blazing--black hair, dark red/brown eyes and black skin, in this form can use demon-like powers. In other form, can only make small force field/bubbles.

Personality-When in glowing mood, is angry and has a management problem, acts irrationally and is not at all like his appearnace, leaderish qualities. When in blazing mode, he is sweet, sensitive and thinks things through, laughs (scarily) alot, but is mistaken for being a demon in this form.

(Just in case you don't which form my chracter is in I'll put either a G-for glowing or B-for blazing, just incase you guys become confused)

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(G)Double N ran towards the girl, "ARGHH! SHE"S DISAPPEARING!!!!"

Everyone cluttered around and Double N asked, "Who can use their power to get this girl out?"

A few people put up thier hands, he pointed to one of them randomly, "You, what can you do?"
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((Jewel Rodriguez- Plant growth))

Jewel ran across the village with care. She had heard of a person crushed under some rubble and wanted to help. Deftly she skid past some ruins and kept running. Her gazelle prance stopped when she found the group of people who were helping get the rubble off.

"What can I do?" Jewel shouted. She was well known and everyone knew she tried to keep everyone safe.

Kumiko's clothes burst off of her as a white tiger appeared in her stead. Kumiko let out a low throaty growl and started picking off larger rocks that she couldn't move when she was human.

The rest of the people turned their attention towards Double N. He asked who can do what. A female villager who had seen better days raised her hand.

"I'm really strong and so is Dingo here."

Dingo, a man with straw colored hair, stepped forward, "Enough of the delaying, help Kumiko!"

The woman who had risen her hand nodded and she advanced on the pile of rubble. Dingo moved back away from the people. Quickly the woman Jewel had identified as Ariana threw rock after rock to Dingo and he threw them away.

Kumiko the tiger helped with the smaller rocks and soon the woman's face appeared. It was bloodied by a broken nose and he arm was twisted awkwardly. Jewel thought of what she needed and reached into her bag. She found gauze pads and disinfectant she had scavenged. She waited for the workers to be done when an outsider yelled, "I'm a healer!"

A teenage boy pushed his way through the crowd to the rubble pile. The girl was freed and the boy put his hand over her face. A glowing green light flowed from his body to hers, healing her. Jewel rushed up and knelt next to the boy.

"You here to help?" he asked, his eyes closed.

"Yes."

He nodded slightly, "I shall give you updates and ask if I need you."

Jewel sighed with relief. That day she had grown acres of corn and wheat for the villagers and that had made her weary. She was happy someone could help out. She sat back in relief and waited.




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**Okay then ignore the other one.**

Cecilia~

I walked up to a girl I didn't remember seeing before.
"Um, hey. I'm Cecilia; do you live in this village? I don't remember seeing you before." I spoke quietly. The girl only looked at me.
Some say laughing is the best medicine but what do you do when you can't laugh anymore?

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Velna---

Velna looked at the girl in front of her. "I live here." She said looking towards the rest of the group. She didn't want to talk to her. "Did you want something?"

"What's your name?" THe girl asked nervously.

"Velna, now what do you want?"
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Cecilia~

I decided this girl wasn't the social type.
"Well I was just wondering. I guess I'll leave you alone." I said starting to walk down the hill. Soon I saw a boy coming into the village. I sighed and walked back to the pond. The boy was wearing sleaves over only part of his arms. I watched him slowly get closer to the village.
Some say laughing is the best medicine but what do you do when you can't laugh anymore?

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*hey laylem is zen the healer?*If not Im still gona take it because this now costs points...*

Zen sat there with his eyes closed. He like the feeling he gave to the wonded as he healed them.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

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To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
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((It doesn't matter who the healer is. I just put him in there ^.^))




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*When do the demons come into the picture.*

Seda-

Seda leaned back against some of the rubble, his hand were scuffed and bloody from pulling the rocks. The girl would be fine, the healer had gotten to her in time. the wind blew over the rubble and Seda stiffened.

The wind carried a dark voice with it, one he hadn't heard in a long time. "Azrayel... Azrayel Fallen."
DANCE- Like no-one is watching
LOVE- Like you've never been hurt
SING- Like no-one is listening
LIVE- Like it's heaven on earth.

Please read and review my novel. The title is Fireborn. Here's the link.

novel.php?id=1157



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